In this memo, the author argues that not sparing enough time to local and weather news and increasing time to national news had led to lose their original viewers. To support this argument, the author points out that a skew of complaints toward local and weather news may be the major reason. The author also reasons that increased local business cancellations also resulted in having less information in their broadcast. The argument is found to be specious in several aspects.
To begin with, the argument relies on the assumption that lack of local business’s advertisement led to insert less local news in their broadcast. Yet the memo provides no substantiating evidence for this assumption. Even though there were less financial support to the local news, there would be equally important news as same as the national news. Local news is unlikely to be broadcasted off-region. What if a huge explosion that destroyed many of local houses with no proper inspection, then exclusive report should be held for several days to alert the media and government to inspect the accident. Thus lacking reliable evidence of losing financial support from advertisements is difficult to accept this hasty conclusion.
Even if the lack of time sparing to weather and local news made to lose viewers turns out to be reliable, the memo fails to provide evidence to support this assumption. Perhaps a majority of viewers could think the information of the next day’s weather is less accurate compared to the next morning’s weather broadcast. Weather always changes and natural phenomena always have possibilities of exceptions. Since Earth is suffering from global warming, unpredictable occasions tends to increase and getting harder to expect the future weather.Whoever could imagine a sudden rainfall in the middle of dessert what just happened in Egypt 2 years ago and imagine sudden volcanic eruption like the one just happened 3 days ago in Hawaii island. Either of these scenarios, if true, would cast serious doubt on the author’s claim that restoring the time devoted to weather and local news to its prior level.
Even if the author can substantiate the two foregoing assumptions, the argument relies on the additional assumption that lack of advertisements of local buisness led to less devote on local news. Yet, perhaps local businesses were just canceling for temporary purpose. For example, a local area which prospered for ship-making industry for the last 20 years could have had an economic strike such as consecutive ship-building firms’ bankruptcies. The utmost thing to do is maybe recovering their damage and resurrect the companies. If then, natural cancel of local business advertisement could be expected. Thus without further reasons for the advertisement cancellation, the author’s argument is seriously flawed.
In sum, the argument is unpersuasive as it stands. To bolster it, the author must provide better evidence that the accuracy of broadcast content is credible enough that can still maintain their viewers. To better assess the argument we would need to know about further information about the background of advertisement cancels.
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: Even if the author can substantiate the two foregoing assumptions, the argument relies on the additional assumption that lack of advertisements of local buisness led to less devote on local news.
Error: buisness Suggestion: business
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flaws:
the argument 1 and argument 3 are duplicated. Here goes a sample:
https://www.testbig.com/gmatgre-argument-task-essays/following-memorand…
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 504 350
No. of Characters: 2607 1500
No. of Different Words: 247 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.738 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.173 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.772 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 197 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 153 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 104 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 63 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.63 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.295 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.487 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.076 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 553, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Whoever
...ing harder to expect the future weather.Whoever could imagine a sudden rainfall in the ...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 614, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...siness advertisement could be expected. Thus without further reasons for the adverti...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, may, so, still, then, thus, for example, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 55.5748502994 122% => OK
Nominalization: 26.0 16.3942115768 159% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2697.0 2260.96107784 119% => OK
No of words: 503.0 441.139720559 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.36182902584 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73578520332 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9738852856 2.78398813304 107% => OK
Unique words: 250.0 204.123752495 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497017892644 0.468620217663 106% => OK
syllable_count: 819.9 705.55239521 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 4.96107784431 0% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.6603037258 57.8364921388 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.375 119.503703932 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9583333333 23.324526521 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.04166666667 5.70786347227 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 6.88822355289 189% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.298710343068 0.218282227539 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0876507710995 0.0743258471296 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0896488003402 0.0701772020484 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169862931346 0.128457276422 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0983281050592 0.0628817314937 156% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 14.3799401198 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 12.5979740519 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.32208582834 105% => OK
difficult_words: 130.0 98.500998004 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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