"A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college." - Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the posi

All humans are not given same abilities. Some are good at arts while others are good at science. Each person has different but unique talent that others could not catch up and it seems providing them special education could develop themselves to become needed people to our society who could develop and benefit their own nations in a fast pace. However, as we live in a certain society, it is mandatory to learn the social orders and morality, also the duty to serve as a citizen, it doesn’t look right to give special education to certain people, in other words chosen people, which could evoke social detestation for being discriminated. Since all human beings are equal, we have to study the same national curriculum until we become adults.

To begin with, providing the same national curriculum means giving equal opportunities to learn with no discrimination. If students learn that society is unfair since from their childhood, this could bring up their mind to engrave social discrepancies unconsciously and could cause crimes of which motivation is showing rages to their society. This could harm many people and exacerbate social order damaging political or even economic systems. For example, unexpected terrorism is upsurging globally. At first, it started from IS in Middle-east countries for showing radical politic messages to their foes however this became to saturate in socially isolated people’s minds to mimic their crime in their own countries: motivations are diverse from misogyny to xenophobia. Just a week ago, Toronto van attack was held by a man who was misogyny and 10 innocent people died. If the nation provide different curriculum and make children lack sense of belonging then this could cause potential crimes later.

In the meanwhile, providing the same curriculum could infringe one’s right to learn. Some advocates providing advanced educations for talented students or any students who wish to expand their particular knowledge is partially needed. Considering its effect in long-term, this could foster children’s dream or ambition when they draw their own future and eventually bring up fast social development comparing to countries which conducts advanced educations. If the nation implements this system, then students will likely to enhance particular skills and knowledge from each parts and when these achievements are aggregated, diverse and incommensurable benefits to the whole society are to be expected.
Nonetheless, providing the same curriculum is mandatory. Same education is needed for the purpose of nurturing suitable citizens for the society: learning social orders and manners in order to persist social, political, economic system. If there are dropouts then those will likely to question and try to destruct our tacit promises. Is murder allowed? Is theft allowed? Everyone has a right for ownership, a right to live and no one should violate it. If someone who didn’t get education why not to violate these and what we should do to persist it, then these crimes will likely to occur in many cases and we are responsible to prevent and educate people until they have a right responsibility for their own acts.

In sum, I agree that requiring special curriculums to particular students often enhance their skills for the purpose of expecting efficient social development which benefits to the whole social members. However, the benefits by providing the same curriculum to students before their entry to college could be a lot more than the former method: preserving our tacit social promises and embodying morality to become as one of our society members.

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Average: 7.9 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 578, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to people'
Suggestion: to people
...o certain people, in other words chosen people, which could evoke social detestation f...
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Line 3, column 675, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'minds mimicking'.
Suggestion: minds mimicking
...rate in socially isolated people's minds to mimic their crime in their own countries: mot...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, nonetheless, so, then, while, for example, in many cases, in other words, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 14.8657303371 148% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 33.0505617978 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 70.0 58.6224719101 119% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3076.0 2235.4752809 138% => OK
No of words: 578.0 442.535393258 131% => OK
Chars per words: 5.32179930796 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.90322654589 4.55969084622 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80508682766 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 289.0 215.323595506 134% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.4932671777 101% => OK
syllable_count: 974.7 704.065955056 138% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 86.317608864 60.3974514979 143% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.04 118.986275619 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.12 23.4991977007 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.96 5.21951772744 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 5.13820224719 195% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193759253491 0.243740707755 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0581293616055 0.0831039109588 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0462548456371 0.0758088955206 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119907069896 0.150359130593 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0173162895704 0.0667264976115 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 14.1392134831 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 48.8420337079 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.1743820225 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 12.1639044944 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.85 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 149.0 100.480337079 148% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 79.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.75 Out of 6
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