The following is the memorandum from the business manager of a television station.
"Over the past year, our late-night news program has devoted increased time to national news and less time to weather and local news. During this time period, most of the complaints received from viewers where concerned with our nations coverage of weather and local news. In addition, local businesses that used to advertise during our late-night news program have just cancelled there advertising contracts with us. Therefore in order to attract more viewers to the program and to avoid losing on any further advertising revenues, we should restore the time devoted to weather and local news to its former level."
Write response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
Though the authors claim of trying to restore the changes made to the news program time split up for local, national & weather news to attract more viewers and prevent loosing on advertiment profit looks like a proper solution, there seems to be a few pit holes in reasoning and lacking of data that might be essential to come to the authers conclusion
Firstly, the auther does not tell us why the late-night news program had thought of alloting more time for the national news than the weather and the local news in the first place. Maybe there was a request from a majority of viewers to make that change? Or was it because the time alloted was split depending upon content, because the amount of national news was more than the local and the weather news that more time was allocated to the former? If that was the case then not only will the news channel be able to allote more time for local news and wether due to lack of content but also will not be logical to restrore to the old time split up
Secondly, we don't know why the advertising companies(add. comps.) have cancelled the contract. The auther has not mentioned a decrease in the viewers, so it cannot be concluded that the problem faced by the add. comp. is with the content of the show. A feedback form sent to all the add. comp. who the news programs have lost might give a clear idea of the actual reson for there contract withdrawals. Maybe the add. comp. had an issue about the news program being 'late- night' and so might have felt that its better to show there advertisements during the evenings when the children will be awake to watch them. Or maybe the company that is advertising has gone bankrupt or that they have started gaining a high amount of profit that they don't feel the need to advertise and hence withdrew the contract.
Thirdly, we just know that the viewers where 'concerned' with the stations coverage of weather and local news. Maybe the viewers don't want any change in the time devoted to those 2 things but feel that the news shown on the channel relating to weather and local news contradict that of the other channels, in this way they are concerned with the coverage maybe? In that case it's better to ask the viewers to state exactly what are changes they need and in what way they aren't happy.
So to conclude a
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: Though the authors claim of trying to restore the changes made to the news program time split up for local, national & weather news to attract more viewers and prevent loosing on advertiment profit looks like a proper solution, there seems to be a few pit holes in reasoning and lacking of data that might be essential to come to the authers conclusion
Error: authers Suggestion: authors
Error: advertiment Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Firstly, the auther does not tell us why the late-night news program had thought of alloting more time for the national news than the weather and the local news in the first place.
Error: alloting Suggestion: allowing
Error: auther Suggestion: author
Sentence: Or was it because the time alloted was split depending upon content, because the amount of national news was more than the local and the weather news that more time was allocated to the former?
Error: alloted Suggestion: allowed
Sentence: If that was the case then not only will the news channel be able to allote more time for local news and wether due to lack of content but also will not be logical to restrore to the old time split up
Error: wether Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: restrore Suggestion: restore
Error: allote Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Secondly, we don't know why the advertising companiesadd. comps. have cancelled the contract.
Error: cancelled Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: companiesadd Suggestion: companies
Sentence: The auther has not mentioned a decrease in the viewers, so it cannot be concluded that the problem faced by the add. comp. is with the content of the show.
Error: auther Suggestion: author
Sentence: A feedback form sent to all the add. comp. who the news programs have lost might give a clear idea of the actual reson for there contract withdrawals.
Error: reson Suggestion: No alternate word
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 10 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 425 350
No. of Characters: 1852 1500
No. of Different Words: 197 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.54 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.358 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.186 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 105 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 85 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 43 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 19 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 30.357 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 14.489 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.643 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.358 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.632 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.156 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: stations'; station's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 55.5748502994 94% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 16.3942115768 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1898.0 2260.96107784 84% => OK
No of words: 421.0 441.139720559 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.50831353919 5.12650576532 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52971130743 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.23322846114 2.78398813304 80% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 204.123752495 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.470308788599 0.468620217663 100% => OK
syllable_count: 574.2 705.55239521 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 130.288621913 57.8364921388 225% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 118.625 119.503703932 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.3125 23.324526521 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.9375 5.70786347227 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 21.0 5.25449101796 400% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.311207084219 0.218282227539 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0810737810421 0.0743258471296 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0993432284202 0.0701772020484 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151831180779 0.128457276422 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.109897679888 0.0628817314937 175% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 14.3799401198 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.01 48.3550499002 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.17 12.5979740519 73% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 98.500998004 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 26.0 12.3882235529 210% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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