The following is part of a memorandum from the president of Humana University.
"Last year the number of students who enrolled in online degree programs offered by nearby Omni University increased by 50 percent. During the same year, Omni showed a significant decrease from prior years in expenditures for dormitory and classroom space, most likely because instruction in the online programs takes place via the Internet. In contrast, over the past three years, enrollment at Humana University has failed to grow, and the cost of maintaining buildings has increased along with our budget deficit. To address these problems, Humana University will begin immediately to create and actively promote online degree programs like those at Omni. We predict that instituting these online degree programs will help Humana both increase its total enrollment and solve its budget problems."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the prediction and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the prediction.
The president of Humana University in the above memorandum describes the profit acquired by Omni University due to introduction of online degree programs. The president further proposes to adopt the online degree program for Humana University sooner to increase enrollment and reduce maintenance cost. This kind of prediction are not acceptable without taking in consideration all factors responsible for profit.
The president while telling about Omni University describes how more online enrollment has reduced maintenance expenditures for dormitories and classroom space. While making such a vague statement the president does not consider other costs that have part in the University budget. The online program essentially requires following expenditures - Internet connectivity, Wireless router devices, Wired Lan Cables, High usage of Electricity, High-end compatible display devices and others. Moreover, the online degree need to ensure that each enrolled student is able to connect the internet, have provision of offline material and if not, the university must be held responsible to provide all such facilities. The president is not in a position to comment on the budget of the University before gathering details about all these possible expenditures.
The president indirectly predicts that increment in total enrollment is mostly due to the attraction of the online degree program. This prediction has not been supported with any solid proof. The alternative factors that can responsible be for increment in enrollment can be the reputation of university, teaching faculty of university, research work carried out in university, various student welfare schemes introduced by university, QS University ranking of University, fee waiver programs as well as stipends along with prizes offered by university and others. The president emphasizing the importance of online degree program over all these factors seems to be unfair in total enrollment contribution.
Moreover, the presidents also predicts that the online degree program will also resolve the budget problems of the University. It is really illogical prediction made by the president. The cost requirement in future can not be analysed based on present conditions. It can be the case, due to the COVID-19 pandemic the students prefer online degree program, but it is also possible that in future the student may give the offline program the more preference. In such case, the cost for infrastructure and facilities such as electricity, instruments, teaching materials and others will act as addons to the currently predicted budget. Thus, the president must consider all possible situation and then carry out estimation of cost for the university budget.
Finally, the only suggestion the president need to follow is to undergo thorough study of all factors of Omni University responsible for their profit as well as losses. Also, without making any prediction must consider some legitimate factors to plan the future budget of university.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 7 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 455 350
No. of Characters: 2512 1500
No. of Different Words: 208 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.619 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.521 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.918 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 214 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 163 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 123 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 90 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.75 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.746 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.6 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.354 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.354 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.07 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 161, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...es for dormitories and classroom space. While making such a vague statement the presi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, if, may, moreover, really, so, then, thus, well, while, kind of, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 28.8173652695 49% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 55.5748502994 104% => OK
Nominalization: 27.0 16.3942115768 165% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2562.0 2260.96107784 113% => OK
No of words: 455.0 441.139720559 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.63076923077 5.12650576532 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61852021839 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00487894534 2.78398813304 108% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 204.123752495 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.476923076923 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 837.9 705.55239521 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59920159681 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 15.0 8.76447105788 171% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.2921563988 57.8364921388 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.1 119.503703932 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.75 23.324526521 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.2 5.70786347227 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.267393765316 0.218282227539 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0913825981505 0.0743258471296 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.08070322759 0.0701772020484 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170592500752 0.128457276422 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0700686662145 0.0628817314937 111% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 14.3799401198 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.22 48.3550499002 67% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.197005988 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.67 12.5979740519 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.27 8.32208582834 111% => OK
difficult_words: 131.0 98.500998004 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 12.3882235529 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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