The following is a petition to the city council of Centerville:
"Over the past three years, there has been a marked increase in cases of 'sidewalk rage,' similar to the irrational anger drivers experience on the road, but instead among sidewalk walkers. The result is an increase in assaults, property damage, and disruptions of normal pedestrian traffic. In order to address this growing problem, the council must ban cell phone use on sidewalks. Not only do people texting or using their phones slow down pedestrian traffic, but they are also more likely to walk into the road or bump into other walkers. Children are especially vulnerable because they are too short to be easily seen. Middletown passed such a ban and not only have they heard no complaints, but the reported incidents of sidewalk crime has gone down significantly."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
Using your cellphone/smartphone while walking to send text messages or replaying to an email the Centerville believs is a major for the increase of sidewalk rage. Taking an action of banning phones while walking Centerville thinks that it will work because it work on Middletown. To evaluate this that will work we need more evidence because there are two different towns.
To begin with, the council of Centervill fails to account that Middletown life's is different from Centervill. What I mean by that: The behavior of Middletown people to be more polite compare to behavor of Centervill people. This is one reason that there was an increase of Centervill to Middletown. In addition to increase the fallacy, the prompt state that there are angry drivers in Centervill but not in Middletown. Thus, the behavior of people plays a major role which is not counted in this argument.
Furthermore, the Centervills council fails to state the population of each city. There is a possibility that the population of the Middletown to be the half of Centervills or the double. We need some numbers in order to address the problem. Having those numbers Centervills council can decide if the comparison with Middletown is a fair or not.
Moreover, there is no evidence that make us sure that the increase of the assaults or property damage came from the sidewalk rage nor from using cellphones. To make it valid Centervill could hire police in roads to observe the situation. Also, in order to reduce the problem of people walking in the roads, rails can be placed in sidewalks.
To sum up, Centervill council falls into fallacies that statead above. Because it worked in Middletown does
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 283 350
No. of Characters: 1366 1500
No. of Different Words: 144 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.102 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.827 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.659 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 96 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 76 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 51 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 34 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.647 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.346 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.647 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.315 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.584 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.114 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 261, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'works'?
Suggestion: works
...lle thinks that it will work because it work on Middletown. To evaluate this that wi...
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Line 9, column 72, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...alls into fallacies that statead above. Because it worked in Middletown does
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, moreover, so, thus, while, i mean, in addition, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 55.5748502994 85% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1407.0 2260.96107784 62% => OK
No of words: 282.0 441.139720559 64% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98936170213 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09790868904 4.56307096286 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85321758035 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 144.0 204.123752495 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.510638297872 0.468620217663 109% => OK
syllable_count: 439.2 705.55239521 62% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.8473053892 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.3538792487 57.8364921388 54% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 82.7647058824 119.503703932 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5882352941 23.324526521 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.88235294118 5.70786347227 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0988179578051 0.218282227539 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0316399848312 0.0743258471296 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0357845102645 0.0701772020484 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0541217216675 0.128457276422 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0231528430481 0.0628817314937 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 14.3799401198 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 48.3550499002 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 12.5979740519 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 98.500998004 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.1389221557 75% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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