The following is a petition to the city council of Centerville Over the past three years there has been a marked increase in cases of sidewalk rage similar to the irrational anger drivers experience on the road but instead among sidewalk walkers The resul

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The following is a petition to the city council of Centerville:

"Over the past three years, there has been a marked increase in cases of 'sidewalk rage,' similar to the irrational anger drivers experience on the road, but instead among sidewalk walkers. The result is an increase in assaults, property damage, and disruptions of normal pedestrian traffic. In order to address this growing problem, the council must ban cell phone use on sidewalks. Not only do people texting or using their phones slow down pedestrian traffic, but they are also more likely to walk into the road or bump into other walkers. Children are especially vulnerable because they are too short to be easily seen. Middletown passed such a ban and not only have they heard no complaints, but the reported incidents of sidewalk crime has gone down significantly."

Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.

The petitioners of Centerville are demanding that texting on the sidewalk should be banned to decrease 'sidewalk rage'. They are claiming that it helped Middletown to decrease such incidents and also it is making children vulnerable on the sidewalks. But they are failing to make a solid case by making some unwarranted assumptions. So, the petitioners of Centerville have failed to make a compelling case to ban texting on the sidewalk by making three faulty assumptions.

First assumption that is not verified is that the sidewalk rage is the result of cellphone use. Was the people engaging in the bad behaviour or anger using cellphones? We don't see any information about that on the petition. It is possible that a large portion of the population of Centerville are generally frustrated and angry. They are pickish without any reason. It may be the case that the sidewalks are full of food carts that are inhibiting the pedstrian speed. This also causing people to fight with the owners of the cart and property destruction. We don't know that as the petitioners didn't present data. If any of these reason are true, then the argument is in question of being invalid. To strengthen the argument, people need to present data.

Secondly, people who submitted the petition are thinking that what solved the sidewalk rage problem in Middletown will be able to the problems of Centerville. But are the two towns same? Are people's behaviour is comparable among these two cities? They haven't presented data on what kind of incidents used to happen in the sidewalks of Middletown. So to ask for a ban on sidewalk texting, people need to present data about the cases and behaviours of the two cities and how are they similar. Othewise, the argument remains unproved.

They are also assuming that children are vulnerable to the people texting on the sidewalks. They are claiming that children are hard to be seen by pedstrian adults. What if children are more noticable to the people texting on the sidewalks, as cellphone user are slightly looking at a lower angle. Petitioners have to evaluate this possibilty before claiming that kids are at risk by the people that are chatting using their phones on the sidewalk.

If these assumptions are not corrected with good arguments and presented some really strong data supporting their argument, the petition cannot be verified. So to strengthen the argument, the people of Centerville need to clear their unwarranted assumptions with clear evidence.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, may, really, second, secondly, so, then, kind of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 35.0 19.6327345309 178% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 28.8173652695 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 55.5748502994 106% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2087.0 2260.96107784 92% => OK
No of words: 414.0 441.139720559 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04106280193 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51076378781 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78756624433 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 204.123752495 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.449275362319 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 654.3 705.55239521 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 4.96107784431 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 19.7664670659 132% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.8473053892 66% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.9424392762 57.8364921388 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.2692307692 119.503703932 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.9230769231 23.324526521 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.92307692308 5.70786347227 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 17.0 6.88822355289 247% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.147837727987 0.218282227539 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0423031267131 0.0743258471296 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0530581523066 0.0701772020484 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0835805084815 0.128457276422 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0521163910392 0.0628817314937 83% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 14.3799401198 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 48.3550499002 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 12.5979740519 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 98.500998004 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.1389221557 72% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 9 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 11 2
No. of Sentences: 26 15
No. of Words: 418 350
No. of Characters: 2037 1500
No. of Different Words: 181 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.522 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.873 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.723 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 145 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 114 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 96 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 55 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.077 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.176 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.577 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.28 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.472 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.074 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5