The following is a petition to the city council of Centerville:
"Over the past three years, there has been a marked increase in cases of 'sidewalk rage,' similar to the irrational anger drivers experience on the road, but instead among sidewalk walkers. The result is an increase in assaults, property damage, and disruptions of normal pedestrian traffic. In order to address this growing problem, the council must ban cell phone use on sidewalks. Not only do people texting or using their phones slow down pedestrian traffic, but they are also more likely to walk into the road or bump into other walkers. Children are especially vulnerable because they are too short to be easily seen. Middletown passed such a ban and not only have they heard no complaints, but the reported incidents of sidewalk crime has gone down significantly."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The conclusion drawn on the ban imposed by Middletown, and its effect on significant drop on reported incidents of sidewalk crime with almost no complaints is predicated on flawed assumptions and is insufficiently supported. In order to properly evaluate the conclusion drawn by the author, more evidence is required.
The author begins by mentioning a marked increase in sidewalk rage over past three years, and as a result there has been an increase in assaults, property damage, and disruptions of normal pedestrian traffic. The author provides little to no information on the growth of such accidents from past three years. There is also no evidence as to what property damages were incurred only by sidewalk rage and not by the irrationally angry drivers. For instance, if the growth of accidents significantly increased to say 50 percent over past three years, with an actual figure will provide a stronger evidence of the author's claim. Also, the supportive information on the assaults and property damages, and the amount incurred to resolve such damages will add to author's claim. Without having proper figure on growth of accidents and mentioning of the property damages incurred by sidewalk rage alone, the argument cannot be properly evaluated.
Moreover, usage of cellphones are held responsible for such accidents and author suggest imposing ban on cell phone usage. However, there is precise relation being made by the author to the problem. There is evidence as to how many pedestrians are causing side walk rage, can there be a possible assumption made that no drivers are involved in causing accidents. Without clear insight on what number of people use cell-phones on sidewalk, and on an average how many people use sidewalks on a busy traffic? Without prior figures and insufficient supportive information provided, the argument cannot be evaluated thoroughly.
Additionally, the author also states that imposing ban on cellphones in Middletown caused significant changes with little to no complaints and less incidents reported. However, the author is only comparing the Middletown's traffic conditions and its imposition on ban. There is no proper evidence whether the population of both cities are same? the average number of vehicles in the city compared to that of Middletown's, The conditions that relate directly to traffic such as the number of business firms in the city, which is directly proportional to the population of the city and also to the traffic conditions in the city. With the proper evidence on the demography and economic factors of the both cities, the author's argument can be properly evaluated with the additional supportive information.
While, the author's claim that imposing a ban on cellphones can lead to less sidewalk incidents occurring as in the case of Middletown's hold good only when enough evidence and sufficient information is provided by the author.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 757, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'author'.
Suggestion: author
...red to resolve such damages will add to authors claim. Without having proper figure on ...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 491, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'busy traffic'.
Suggestion: busy traffic
...verage how many people use sidewalks on a busy traffic? Without prior figures and insufficient...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 144, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun incidents is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...hanges with little to no complaints and less incidents reported. However, the author...
^^^^
Line 7, column 345, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...the population of both cities are same? the average number of vehicles in the city ...
^^^
Line 7, column 715, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...conomic factors of the both cities, the authors argument can be properly evaluated with...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, moreover, so, while, as to, for instance, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 11.1786427146 143% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 7.0 28.8173652695 24% => OK
Preposition: 77.0 55.5748502994 139% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 16.3942115768 128% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2457.0 2260.96107784 109% => OK
No of words: 464.0 441.139720559 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.29525862069 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64119157421 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91083222217 2.78398813304 105% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 204.123752495 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.441810344828 0.468620217663 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 785.7 705.55239521 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 4.96107784431 0% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.67365269461 299% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.2371932367 57.8364921388 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.315789474 119.503703932 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4210526316 23.324526521 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.26315789474 5.70786347227 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 15.0 6.88822355289 218% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.136701091051 0.218282227539 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0460264218368 0.0743258471296 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0590710348573 0.0701772020484 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0723324569424 0.128457276422 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0559986885446 0.0628817314937 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 14.3799401198 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 48.3550499002 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.76 12.5979740519 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.74 8.32208582834 105% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 98.500998004 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 757, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'author'.
Suggestion: author
...red to resolve such damages will add to authors claim. Without having proper figure on ...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 491, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'busy traffic'.
Suggestion: busy traffic
...verage how many people use sidewalks on a busy traffic? Without prior figures and insufficient...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 144, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun incidents is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...hanges with little to no complaints and less incidents reported. However, the author...
^^^^
Line 7, column 345, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...the population of both cities are same? the average number of vehicles in the city ...
^^^
Line 7, column 715, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...conomic factors of the both cities, the authors argument can be properly evaluated with...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, moreover, so, while, as to, for instance, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 11.1786427146 143% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 7.0 28.8173652695 24% => OK
Preposition: 77.0 55.5748502994 139% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 16.3942115768 128% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2457.0 2260.96107784 109% => OK
No of words: 464.0 441.139720559 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.29525862069 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64119157421 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91083222217 2.78398813304 105% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 204.123752495 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.441810344828 0.468620217663 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 785.7 705.55239521 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 4.96107784431 0% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.67365269461 299% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.2371932367 57.8364921388 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.315789474 119.503703932 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4210526316 23.324526521 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.26315789474 5.70786347227 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 15.0 6.88822355289 218% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.136701091051 0.218282227539 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0460264218368 0.0743258471296 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0590710348573 0.0701772020484 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0723324569424 0.128457276422 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0559986885446 0.0628817314937 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 14.3799401198 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 48.3550499002 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.76 12.5979740519 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.74 8.32208582834 105% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 98.500998004 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.