The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette.
"On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The author of the letter concludes that limiting the number rentals of moped will reduce moped accidents in Balmer island as similar moped accidents were reduced last year in Seaville town following the council’s enforced limits on moped rentals. The author’s conclusion is predicated on flawed assumptions and is insufficiently supported. In order to proper evaluate the author’s remarks on his observations on the matter, more questions are need to be answered.
The author begins by mentioning that to reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of the Balmer island should limit the number of rentals on moped. There is no mention on how many of the accidents are being caused solely by moped and not by any other vehicles in the island. If so, what figure of moped accidents tied to total number of accidents is considered to justify the statement. If the number of moped accidents is comparatively mere to other accidents in the town, then the author’s conclusion is not evidently supported at all to enforce limits on the moped rentals.
Moreover, the author also states the Balmer Island to limit the number of moped rentals by the island’s rental companies from 50 to 25 per day. However, without having proper evidences as to signify the causation of accidents solely by mopeds, as discussed in the previous paragraph, the author is again failing to provide evident support. Although, the population in the Balmer island increases to 100,000 during summer, there is no evidence as to how many mopeds are actually being rented by the populace from the rental companies. Perhaps, the author overlooks the possibility that many mopeds could be owned by residents and not rented from companies. If at all the accidents caused by mopeds are more, then even accounting to reduce the number of rentals will not help, as many of mopeds would still be used by residents, thereby not making significant attempt to change the number of accidents.
Additionally, the author also compares that 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents achieved by Seaville town will also be applicable for the Balmer island. However, the author fails to mention the basis on which this comparison would be viable. What is the population of both the towns? On an average what number of tourists visit Seaville island in the summer, if so, how may mopeds are rented on an average compared to that of Balmer islands. What number of accidents were actually reduced by enforcing limits on moped rentals? There are several factors that can differentiate the two towns. The 50 percent reduction in accidents without tied to proper figure cannot be accounted to consider and evaluate the author’s conclusion. Therefore, without having proper evidences and insufficiently supported statements, the author’s conclusion cannot be substantiated thoroughly.
The author’s implication to reduce the moped accidents by implementing limits on moped rentals by comparing such an effect in the neighboring Seaville town fails to provide additional support to strengthen the argument. However, with the questions answered as discussed in the previous paragraphs, the author’s argument can be properly evaluated.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 517 350
No. of Characters: 2652 1500
No. of Different Words: 197 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.768 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.13 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.733 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 231 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 153 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 112 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 77 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.5 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.223 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.545 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.363 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.53 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.102 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 618, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...to enforce limits on the moped rentals. Moreover, the author also states the Bal...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, however, if, look, may, moreover, so, still, then, therefore, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.6327345309 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 8.0 28.8173652695 28% => OK
Preposition: 87.0 55.5748502994 157% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2732.0 2260.96107784 121% => OK
No of words: 517.0 441.139720559 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28433268859 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76839952204 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85727967741 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 204.123752495 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.398452611219 0.468620217663 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 850.5 705.55239521 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 4.96107784431 0% => OK
Article: 14.0 8.76447105788 160% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.4604071819 57.8364921388 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.181818182 119.503703932 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5 23.324526521 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.77272727273 5.70786347227 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 14.0 6.88822355289 203% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.276742315294 0.218282227539 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0957559888308 0.0743258471296 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0930459726402 0.0701772020484 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.183627048982 0.128457276422 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0682529488756 0.0628817314937 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 14.3799401198 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.3550499002 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.64 12.5979740519 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 125.0 98.500998004 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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