There is now evidence that the relaxed pace of life in small towns promotes better health and greater longevity than does the hectic pace of life in big cities. Businesses in the small town of Leeville report fewer days of sick leave taken by individual workers than do businesses in the nearby large city of Masonton. Furthermore, Leeville has only one physician for its one thousand residents, but in Masonton the proportion of physicians to residents is five times as high. Finally, the average age of Leeville residents is significantly higher than that of Masonton residents. These findings suggest that the relaxed pace of life in Leeville allows residents to live longer, healthier lives.
Write a response in which you discuss one or more alternative explanations that could rival the proposed explanation and explain how your explanation(s) can plausibly account for the facts presented in the argument.
The relaxed pace of life in Leeville allows residents to live longer healthy lives contrast to fast pace of life in Masonton is suggested by the findings. The conclusion is insufficiently supported with many possible assumptions. More evidence is needed to properly evaluate the argument.
Firstly, the businesses in small town of Leeville reports fewer days of sick leaves than do business in the big city, Masonton. The information is proportionally correlating sick leaves with the health conditions of the workers, lesser the number of sick leaves, healthier the workers are. However, this assumption accounts considering same number of workers being employed in the firms in both Leeville and Masonton. The business firms in big cities are considerably large with the organization and number of associates working. Without having proper information on how many of the workers reported sick leaves from both the businesses in Leevile and Masonton, with the sample size, that is the total number of workers employed, can provide additional evidence to consider whether fast pace of life affects health of an individual. If the ratio of number of sick leaves being reported to the total number of working associates for a period in businesses in Leeville is smaller than that of Masonton, the evidence is supportive, else it suggests the opposite making the claim implausible. Without having proper evidences, we cannot associate the factor of sick leaves to health condition of workers.
Furthermore, Leeville has only one physician for thousand residents while Masonton has 5 times the ratio of Leeville. However, we are not given credible information as to how the number of physicians for certain number of resident accounts to plausible explanation. Perhaps, residents of leeville did not report or visit the physician and depend completely on the medicines from the pharmaceutical stores. On the other hand, residents of Masonton, frequently visit physicians, and number of visits are recorded. Maybe because the residents in bigger cities are more careful with their health and don’t want to take any health risks directly consult physician rather than purchasing medicines for stores. These additional evidences can if not otherwise, reinforce the claim. Having not much credible information, we cannot account this reason to be supportive to the conclusion of the author.
Additionally, the average age of residents of leeville is mentioned to be significantly higher than those of Masonton. There is no evidence as to what is the demographics of the population of both cities. Perhaps, residents of Leeville are more aged and have settled there after retirement and residents of Masonton are younger and have settled there recently for the opportunities it provides. Hence, in this condition, the average ages significantly differ and the city with more elderly people will have more average compared to other city with more younger ones. Therefore, without having evidences on these criteria, we cannot assess the author’s argument that Leeville with greater average age has relaxed pace of life contributing to the same.
The conclusion that relaxed pace of life in leeville accounts for good health and longevity is insufficiently supported. The additional evidences such as the ratio of number of sick leaves reported by both businesses to the total number, average ages with the demographic information etc. as discussed is needed to properly evaluate the author’s argument.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 548 350
No. of Characters: 2890 1500
No. of Different Words: 221 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.838 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.274 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.838 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 238 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 180 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 138 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 79 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.833 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.75 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.458 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.314 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.502 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.098 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 50, Rule ID: NODT_DOZEN[1]
Message: Use simply: 'a thousand'.
Suggestion: a thousand
...re, Leeville has only one physician for thousand residents while Masonton has 5 times th...
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Line 7, column 268, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: thereafter
...Leeville are more aged and have settled there after retirement and residents of Masonton ar...
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Line 7, column 549, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'younger' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: younger
...ore average compared to other city with more younger ones. Therefore, without having evidenc...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, so, therefore, while, as to, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 13.6137724551 29% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 28.8173652695 59% => OK
Preposition: 89.0 55.5748502994 160% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2965.0 2260.96107784 131% => OK
No of words: 547.0 441.139720559 124% => OK
Chars per words: 5.42047531993 5.12650576532 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.83611736076 4.56307096286 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93059117838 2.78398813304 105% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 204.123752495 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.424131627057 0.468620217663 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 954.0 705.55239521 135% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 19.7664670659 126% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.0780028175 57.8364921388 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.6 119.503703932 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.88 23.324526521 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.56 5.70786347227 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.264015720913 0.218282227539 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0783626628703 0.0743258471296 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0897505667179 0.0701772020484 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161763902999 0.128457276422 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0762520937345 0.0628817314937 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 14.3799401198 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 48.3550499002 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 12.5979740519 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 131.0 98.500998004 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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