The argument above states an analogy between measures adopted by Tobor Techonologies and those proposed by DIord Corp in reducing employee sick days, focusing on mental illnesses as a cause of absenteeism. However, the argument is not entirely logically convincing, while it ignores several certain crucial assumptions.
One of the first faulty assumptions that the argument makes is that the psychologist is successful in curing the mental illnesses of employees. The employees may or may not have benefitted from the psychologist's help. Also, it assumes that the reduction in number of sick days is solely due to the implementation program. It cannot be assumed so, when it is possible that there are other reasons causing a decrease in number of leaves. The number may have been reduced due to better health facilities, decreased occurences of diseases or decrease in casual leaves. On similar lines it assumes the mental illnesses to be the only reasons of decrease in employee attendance.
Sencondly, the argument assumes the working conditions to be the same in the two companies. The results in Tabor techonologies cannot be extrapolated to Dior Corp, unless we consider the working conditions in the companies which may or may not be suitabe for employees or have the same conditions. Similarly the reason for increase in sick days in Dior Corps may be other than mental illnesses, in which case, the insurance program and the counseling sessions won't work.
The last wrong assumption of with argument is that increase in attendance will increase in productivity. This does not consider the fact that productivity may not increase if other factors like employee negligence, strikes, shutdowns, technical difficulties may lead to a decrease in productivity.
The argument can thus be shown to have many unstated assumptions that weakens its claims and puts forth a weak statement. The argument could have been strengthened by giving a percentage of leaves in Dior Corps that were caused by mental illness, or the similarities in the working conditions that could endorse the implementation of same measures in both companies.
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 342 350
No. of Characters: 1763 1500
No. of Different Words: 165 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.3 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.155 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.947 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 135 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 110 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 81 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 51 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.8 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.73 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.35 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.609 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.129 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 357, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ram. It cannot be assumed so, when it is possible that there are other reasons ca...
^^
Line 3, column 298, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Similarly,
... employees or have the same conditions. Similarly the reason for increase in sick days in...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, may, similarly, so, then, thus, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 55.5748502994 83% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1796.0 2260.96107784 79% => OK
No of words: 341.0 441.139720559 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26686217009 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02811733366 2.78398813304 109% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 204.123752495 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.507331378299 0.468620217663 108% => OK
syllable_count: 560.7 705.55239521 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.6771678168 57.8364921388 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.733333333 119.503703932 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7333333333 23.324526521 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.2 5.70786347227 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.171836605591 0.218282227539 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0597060238606 0.0743258471296 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0635734537205 0.0701772020484 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0961895467371 0.128457276422 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0513396421929 0.0628817314937 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 14.3799401198 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.5979740519 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.85 8.32208582834 106% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 98.500998004 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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