The following is from a recent email from the Diord Corp. Human Resources Manager:
“Tobor Technologies found that mental health problems and mental illness were responsible for about 15 percent of employee sick days. Tobor amended its employee insurance plan so that workers receive the same coverage for mental illness as they do for physical illness. In addition, the company hired an on-site psychologist and created a system that allows workers to schedule confidential counseling appointments. After one year, the number of sick days used by employees declined by 10 percent. Diord Corp. has had an increase in employee sick days over the past two years, so we should introduce a similar insurance plan and counseling program. These measures will surely reduce employee absenteeism and cause an increase in productivity.”
Write a response in which you examine the argument’s unstated assumptions, making sure to explain how the argument depends on the assumptions and what the implications are if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The argument that human resource manager claimed by amending their insurance schemes and introducing a counselling program, the Diord corp would be able to reduce the `employee absenteeism “and hence increase productivity is not entirely convincing since it ignores such crucial assumptions.
First, The argument assumes that, the policy which proved effective at Tobor technologies will also be good at Dior corp. This is entirely a wrong idea because the argument does not provide any evidence for believing so. Even if it were the case, the policy was to amend the insurance coverage of the employees. While the policy is beneficial to the employees as it would help them with their treatment facilities. It would not reduce the number of leaves they take . The coverage would help an employee in recovering from his/her illness after it has occurred and during the course of illness, the employee might remain absent. Tobor knew the exact percentage of employees that were suffering from mental illness along with physical illness . 15 % of absence were attributed to the mental illness. This argument does not suggest that similar type investigation or procedure was followed and simply implemented in Tobor technology. This strategy in Dior corp which can have negative impact on the mental illness.
Second, the argument does not address the need of investigation before applying this plan in Dior company. Furthermore the psychological counsellor who operated on site in Tobor company resulting in long spending hours in the counselling which can potentially pseudo working environments which may lead to more sick days.
Third the argument has an aggressive analogy, besides the fact that the author does not simply imply that both companies are same, one of them is technology company and other one is a corporation. In this case, the policy is different, situation and everything is different. Thus the argument was not sound, The evidence in support of the conclusion.
The evidence in support in schemes and support of the conclusion. Same insurance plan and counselling as Tobor to reduce employee absenteeism, does little to prove the conclusion.
Ultimately the argument might have strength if the author could provide a precise number of sick employees, evidence that workers actually used the system. Therefore additional cost that could also increase the employer absents. If the manager can prove any definite relationship between the insurance and coverage schemes and reduction in employee sick leaves without these existence, the claims remains vulnerable to loopholes and pitfalls.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 410 350
No. of Characters: 2150 1500
No. of Different Words: 205 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.5 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.244 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.722 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 164 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 134 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 96 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 57 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.5 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.724 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.55 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.297 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.514 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.127 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 194, Rule ID: EN_UNPAIRED_BRACKETS
Message: Unpaired symbol: '”' seems to be missing
...o reduce the 'employee absenteeism “and hence increase productivity is not e...
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Line 3, column 116, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...r technologies will also be good at Dior corp. This is entirely a wrong idea beca...
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Line 3, column 467, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...ot reduce the number of leaves they take . The coverage would help an employee in ...
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Line 3, column 567, Rule ID: DURING_THE_COURSE_OF[1]
Message: Use simply 'during'.
Suggestion: during
...s/her illness after it has occurred and during the course of illness, the employee might remain abse...
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Line 3, column 743, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...ntal illness along with physical illness . 15 % of absence were attributed to the ...
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Line 5, column 108, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Furthermore,
...ore applying this plan in Dior company. Furthermore the psychological counsellor who operat...
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Line 7, column 179, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...them is technology company and other one is a corporation. In this case, the poli...
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Line 7, column 277, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
... situation and everything is different. Thus the argument was not sound, The evidenc...
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Line 10, column 157, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
... that workers actually used the system. Therefore additional cost that could also increas...
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Line 10, column 370, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this existence' or 'these existences'?
Suggestion: this existence; these existences
...duction in employee sick leaves without these existence, the claims remains vulnerable to looph...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, besides, but, first, furthermore, hence, if, may, second, so, therefore, third, thus, while, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 55.5748502994 83% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 16.3942115768 146% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2216.0 2260.96107784 98% => OK
No of words: 409.0 441.139720559 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.41809290954 5.12650576532 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49708221141 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83490158222 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 204.123752495 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.520782396088 0.468620217663 111% => OK
syllable_count: 692.1 705.55239521 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 61.5731410656 57.8364921388 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.523809524 119.503703932 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4761904762 23.324526521 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.42857142857 5.70786347227 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 6.88822355289 189% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.262592040497 0.218282227539 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0699810028521 0.0743258471296 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0723422472254 0.0701772020484 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112110088484 0.128457276422 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0835135038737 0.0628817314937 133% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 14.3799401198 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 48.3550499002 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 12.5979740519 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.67 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 98.500998004 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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