The following recommendation appeared in a memo from the mayor of the town of Hopewell.
"Two years ago, the nearby town of Ocean View built a new municipal golf course and resort hotel. During the past two years, tourism in Ocean View has increased, new businesses have opened there, and Ocean View's tax revenues have risen by 30 percent. Therefore, the best way to improve Hopewell's economy — and generate additional tax revenues — is to build a golf course and resort hotel similar to those in Ocean View."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The author of the argument proposes to build a golf course and resort similar to the one in the nearby town Ocean View which is believed to improve the town’s economy just like it did in the town of Ocean View. Close examination of the assumptions reveals that they cannot lend credible support to the conclusion.
Firstly, the author wholly assumes that the conditions in the town of Hopewell are similar to that to the town of Ocean View, which is fallacious as their no evidence provided to support any kind of similarity between the two towns. The geographical, economic, and political conditions of one town might be different from the other. Building a golf course and resort similar to the one in the town Ocean View might not be advantageous to the town Hopewell.
Secondly, is the establishment of the resort hotel and the golf course solely the reason for economical boom in the town of Ocean View? This assumption of the author doesn’t seem plausible. The author talks about the golf course and the resort hotel which was built two years ago, is it not possible that the variations around the town in these two years also made a contribution to the town’s economy. Besides, there is no proof provided by the author that the rise in the tax revenues is the result of the construction of the golf course and the hotel. The other factors which may be involved in the economic growth of the OceanView town are obscured. Accordingly, the author should look thoroughly into the aspects contributing to the economy of the town of Ocean view.
Thirdly, since the author is going through this whole building process to enhance the town’s economy, does the town has funds to support the construction of the golf course and the resort? It can be implied from the author’s argument that the economy of the town of Hopewell isn’t doing so well. Accordingly, more information about the economy of Hopewell is required to ensure the credibility of the construction.
To sum up, the author fails to substantiate his claim that building a golf course and resort will contribute to the town’s economy. To reinforce it, the author would have to do thorough research to discover the aspects that lead to the economical benefit of the Ocean View town. Additionally, he would have to present the evidence that supports his claim that building the golf course and the resort will be beneficial to this town as well. Moreover, the author must provide evidence that the town of Hopewell can afford this construction. Therefore, if the argument had included the given factors discussed above, it would have been more thorough and plausible.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 453 350
No. of Characters: 2133 1500
No. of Different Words: 180 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.613 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.709 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.557 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 144 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 104 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 73 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 37 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.842 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.999 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.684 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.43 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.596 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.14 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 13, column 122, Rule ID: DOES_NP_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'have'?
Suggestion: have
... the town's economy, does the town has funds to support the construction of th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, besides, but, first, firstly, if, look, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, third, thirdly, well, kind of, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 55.5748502994 119% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2239.0 2260.96107784 99% => OK
No of words: 451.0 441.139720559 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9645232816 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60833598836 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74717200889 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 204.123752495 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.412416851441 0.468620217663 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 684.0 705.55239521 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.2911785972 57.8364921388 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.842105263 119.503703932 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7368421053 23.324526521 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.73684210526 5.70786347227 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.348847140612 0.218282227539 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.125758860397 0.0743258471296 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108788835333 0.0701772020484 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.232892629312 0.128457276422 181% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0845054713929 0.0628817314937 134% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 14.3799401198 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.3550499002 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 98.500998004 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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