The personnel director of the Acme Publishing company recommends the company to demand every employee to take the Easy Read course. To substantiate the recommendation, the director cited that one graduates can read a 500-page reports within 2 hours and another got promoted after finishing the course. However, careful examination of the argument reveals the recommendation to be unconvincing before several critical questions could be answered.
Firstly, the director did not provide enough information on the improvement of the speed reading course for the graduate who was able to read a 500-page report in two hours. Does the graduate could undertake the report reading task with such a speed before the course? Is the report made up with mainly text or figures? There is possibility that the graduate was already good at speed reading before the course. The 500-page report might costs the graduate even less than two hours before taking the course. The report, although with a large number of pages, could consists mainly of large figures and pictures. Without providing answers to related questions like above, the director could not convince us that the speed reading course can lift the reading speed tremendously.
Secondly, the director fails to offer detailed reason for the promotion of the graduate who rose from an assistant manager to vice president in less than one year. Is the graduate from top universities which are strongly favored by senior members of the company? Does the graduate work hard in the company? There is possibility that the diligence of the graduate was appreciated by the senior members of the company and lead to his promotion. Also we could not deny the probability that the graduate got the chance of promotion due to his family relationship. Before answering these questions we could not be convince that the promotion of the graduate results from the participation of the speed reading course.
Moreover, the director might have made a wrong judgement about the cost of the reading course while contending that $500 per employee is a small price for the Acme Publishing Company. We have to ask a few questions about the operation situation about the Acme company. Is the Acme company sufficiently abundant in money to afford the price of $500 per employee? Is current economic situation as well as promise of the publishing industry positive enough? It is possible that the Acme company is only a small company with limited profit every year, thus to afford the price of $500 per employee is too heavy a burden. The publishing industry might be on a path of declining with fewer and fewer people buying books these years. Without ruling out these possibilities, the conclusion that $500 per employee is affordable for Acme company could not be reached.
In sum, the director fails to provide sufficiently cogent answers to several critical questions, rendering the recommendation unfounded as it stands. To bolster the recommendeation, the director should investigate the actual improvement of the course on speed reading. In addition, the director should also gather information about financial situation of the Acme company.
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: To bolster the recommendeation, the director should investigate the actual improvement of the course on speed reading.
Error: recommendeation Suggestion: recommendation
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flaws:
the arguments are not exactly right on the point.
Let's analyze the structure of the statement and argue accordingly:
condition 1:
Many other companies have recently stated that having their employees take the Easy Read Speed-Reading Course has greatly improved productivity. One graduate of the course was able to read a 500-page report in only two hours; another graduate rose from an assistant manager to vice president of the company in under a year. Obviously, the faster you can read, the more information you can absorb in a single workday.
//1. maybe other reason caused the improvement
2. two samples are not big enough
condition 2:
Moreover, Easy Read would cost Acme only $500 per employee—a small price to pay when you consider the benefits. Included in this fee is a three-week seminar in Spruce City and a lifelong subscription to the Easy Read newsletter.
//suppose a company has 500 employees, it is still a big money: 500 X $500 = $250,000, and also argue against 'a three-week seminar in Spruce City and a lifelong subscription to the Easy Read newsletter'
conclusion:
Clearly, to improve productivity, Acme should require all of our employees to take the Easy Read course.
//maybe only some employees need this course
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 26 15
No. of Words: 513 350
No. of Characters: 2610 1500
No. of Different Words: 219 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.759 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.088 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.731 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 200 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 154 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 106 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 58 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.731 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.984 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.308 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.335 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.545 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.148 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 535, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...g the course. The report, although with a large number of pages, could consists mainly of large f...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 566, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'consist'
Suggestion: consist
...ugh with a large number of pages, could consists mainly of large figures and pictures. W...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 444, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
... the company and lead to his promotion. Also we could not deny the probability that ...
^^^^
Line 5, column 561, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Before” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...omotion due to his family relationship. Before answering these questions we could not ...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, thus, well, while, in addition, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 55.5748502994 130% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 16.3942115768 134% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2664.0 2260.96107784 118% => OK
No of words: 513.0 441.139720559 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19298245614 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75914943092 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81398987874 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 204.123752495 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.432748538012 0.468620217663 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 829.8 705.55239521 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.76447105788 148% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 19.7664670659 132% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.262133248 57.8364921388 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.461538462 119.503703932 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7307692308 23.324526521 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.19230769231 5.70786347227 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.308348532568 0.218282227539 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0878532205851 0.0743258471296 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0813406708582 0.0701772020484 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169703921069 0.128457276422 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0469914115672 0.0628817314937 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 14.3799401198 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 12.5979740519 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 98.500998004 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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