The following recommendation was made by the president and administrative staff of Grove College, a private institution, to the college's governing committee.
"Recently, there have been discussions about ending Grove College's century-old tradition of all-female education by admitting male students into our programs. At a recent faculty meeting, a majority of faculty members voted in favor of coeducation, arguing that it would encourage more students to apply to Grove. However, Grove students, both past and present, are against the idea of coeducation. Eighty percent of the students responding to a survey conducted by the student government wanted the school to remain all female, and over half of the alumnae who answered a separate survey also opposed coeducation. Therefore, we recommend maintaining Grove College's tradition of all-female education. We predict that keeping the college all-female will improve morale among students and convince alumnae to keep supporting the college financially."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The topic was about the idea of converting Grove college into coedducation college, which was earlier all-female college. The argument is based on unwarranted reasons and flawed for the foloowing reasons.
First of all, the author claimed that the converting female college to coeducation conllege is in discussin and it might be possible that instead of all the discussion the college management had not decided the final decission yet and it remain all-female college. The author also claimed that 80 percent of the Grove students angainst the idea of coeducation college, but the author does not give us any actual data on the survey, for example how many students took part in the survey and how many had no preferences. It might be possible that only 10 or 20 students took part from whole college and eighty percent gave their response, besides a percentage does not represents whole population. It might be possible that the students are skeptical about the decision but it might help to increase moral values of the students.
The author also claimed that there was a secret survey conducted with alumnae and half of them against the idea of idea of coeducation college. The author does not gave any reasons why the conclave survey was needed and how many alumnae took the part in the survey. It might be possible that 2 or 3 alumnaea give their response. It might be possible that the author deliberately choose those people who had opposing view and conducted survey on them. Also, the author deoes no gave us any data or points on what basis or on what evidence they are opposing the coeducation.
The author also claimed that by maintainging the tradition can help students to increase their moral values and support the college financially. Where it might be possible that, since the college is private, the finance supporters actually demand the college to be coeducation. It might be also possible that the finance supporting was curtailed and that is is way they need more students to admitted to the college. So, the author's conclusion is facile.
For the above reasons the claim of the author is flawed and the argument based on unwarranted reasons. Also, the author failed to provide any convincing data which corroborate the authors claimed that keeping the tradition will benifits the college.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 389 350
No. of Characters: 1896 1500
No. of Different Words: 155 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.441 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.874 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.533 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 140 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 108 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 67 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 35 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.882 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.542 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.647 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.399 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.601 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.169 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 239, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'remains'?
Suggestion: remains
... decided the final decission yet and it remain all-female college. The author also cla...
^^^^^^
Line 2, column 667, Rule ID: DOES_X_HAS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'represent'? As 'do' is already inflected, the verb cannot also be inflected.
Suggestion: represent
...response, besides a percentage does not represents whole population. It might be possible ...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 667, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'represent'
Suggestion: represent
...response, besides a percentage does not represents whole population. It might be possible ...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 108, Rule ID: PHRASE_REPETITION[1]
Message: This phrase is duplicated. You should probably leave only 'idea of'.
Suggestion: idea of
...th alumnae and half of them against the idea of idea of coeducation college. The author does no...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 164, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'give'
Suggestion: give
...oeducation college. The author does not gave any reasons why the conclave survey was...
^^^^
Line 3, column 474, Rule ID: NOW[1]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
... survey on them. Also, the author deoes no gave us any data or points on what basi...
^^
Line 4, column 356, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: is
...nance supporting was curtailed and that is is way they need more students to admitted...
^^^^^
Line 4, column 426, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...nts to admitted to the college. So, the authors conclusion is facile. For the above re...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, besides, but, first, if, so, for example, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 11.1786427146 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 28.8173652695 111% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 55.5748502994 65% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1932.0 2260.96107784 85% => OK
No of words: 389.0 441.139720559 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96658097686 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59901113429 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 204.123752495 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.416452442159 0.468620217663 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 608.4 705.55239521 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.3921533923 57.8364921388 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.647058824 119.503703932 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8823529412 23.324526521 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.11764705882 5.70786347227 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.10575637207 0.218282227539 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0402012401758 0.0743258471296 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0539035313044 0.0701772020484 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0783205152421 0.128457276422 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0587581409901 0.0628817314937 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.3799401198 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 98.500998004 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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