The following recommendation was made by the president and administrative staff of Grove College, a private institution, to the college's governing committee.
"We recommend that Grove College preserve its century-old tradition of all-female education rather than admit men into its programs. It is true that a majority of faculty members voted in favor of coeducation, arguing that it would encourage more students to apply to Grove. But 80 percent of the students responding to a survey conducted by the student government wanted the school to remain all female, and over half of the alumnae who answered a separate survey also opposed coeducation. Keeping the college all female will improve morale among students and convince alumnae to keep supporting the college financially."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The president and the administrative staff of Grove college recommends to its geoverning commitee that the college should preserve its century-old tradition and not admit men into its programs. The recommendation is based on survey conducted by student government and on other survey that over fity percent of college alumnae opposed coeducation. Before, heeding to recommendation and keeping the all-female education unchanged, the college's governing committe should address the following question to get more reasonability on the recommendation.
To begin with, was the survey conducted by student government impartial and not influenced? If it turn out the survey was influence by some student who does not want coeducation simply because of the irradical thinking that allowing men would make the college less sacred and impure. Hence, if the student informed the voting of every student then, then it makes the survey biased and influenced. Also, the student government could be venal and against the idea of coeducation. So they could have placed a compromised voting mechanism in which the student government can manipulate the votes. If this possibilites are true, then it seriously affects the basis of the recommendation and governing committee should not jump on to the recommendation before doing their own research.
Additionaly, was the other survey on alumnae had responses from a large number of alumnae or was it a small number? In other words, was the number of responses large enough? The surveys says that over half of the alumnae who answered the survey opposed the idea. Well, it might be the case that the number of alumni who answered might be very less and hence, it cannot be used as a strong reason to think that majority of alumae are against this idea. For instance, suppose only 10 out of 100 alumnae answered the survey and thus based on its statistics only 5 oppose the coeducation. Now, it does not take into account the view of other 95 people. Hence, this possibility breaks another pillar on which the recommendation is based on.
Hence, only when the committe gets a detailed and reasonable answers to these questions, they sould take further decision. Thus, the arguments made by the administrative staff hold a little water and need more evidence to reach to a reasonable conclusion.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
0No. of Spelling Errors: 13 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 378 350
No. of Characters: 1908 1500
No. of Different Words: 189 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.409 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.048 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.846 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 137 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 102 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 70 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 52 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.326 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.314 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.514 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.077 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 100, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'turns'?
Suggestion: turns
...ent impartial and not influenced? If it turn out the survey was influence by some st...
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Line 9, column 66, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...er survey on alumnae had responses from a large number of alumnae or was it a small number? In ot...
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Line 9, column 188, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[1]
Message: You should probably use 'say'.
Suggestion: say
... of responses large enough? The surveys says that over half of the alumnae who answe...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, if, so, then, thus, well, for instance, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 55.5748502994 83% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 16.3942115768 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1966.0 2260.96107784 87% => OK
No of words: 378.0 441.139720559 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.20105820106 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40933352052 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91086568736 2.78398813304 105% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 204.123752495 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.505291005291 0.468620217663 108% => OK
syllable_count: 612.9 705.55239521 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.8922516928 57.8364921388 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.222222222 119.503703932 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 23.324526521 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.55555555556 5.70786347227 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.67664670659 214% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.238355034118 0.218282227539 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0710027374171 0.0743258471296 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103569847593 0.0701772020484 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156967149684 0.128457276422 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.163380904617 0.0628817314937 260% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 14.3799401198 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.88 12.5979740519 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 98.500998004 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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