Some people believe that government officials must carry out the will of the people they serve. Others believe that officials should base their decisions on their own judgment.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
Government officials hold the responsibility of taking the judgement judiciously and impartially. Some people believe that they must carry out the will of the people they serve. While, other side beileves that the decisions should be of their own judgement. I think that the officials should take decisions using their own judgement. The following three reasons explain why I align more with this view.
If the officials heed the will of people, then the decisions might not always be impartial and indifferent. For instance, if the public's opinion is highly influenced by a celebrity who is venal. In this case, the public are swayed by the influence and might not see the larger view of the ploy. So, the government offical will be forced to carry the public will even though he/she has a insight about the influence of the celebrity. This results in wrong decisions and does harm than good to the society.
Additionly, as the government officials are trained and because they have higher access to resources, the government official knows the nitty-gritty of the happening. This gives them more variables and a larger view for decision making. Lets assume that because of monetary crisis in a nation, the public wants the government to lower the price hikes of a resource. Although, from the surface it might look like a solution to the crisis in people's eyes, from the report which the officials have generated and from the surveys they have conducted, the government official clearly knows this will of public will negatively affect the current situation. Hence, people might not know the full story behind an event and their will might not be reasonable. Thus, the officials, being more aware of the situation can handle it with judiciousness.
Now, one might say that the government official might not know about the requirements and the demands of the public, and thus carry out their will to fulfill the need. But perhaps, as argued before, the will of public may be influence by a malicious entity or people might not be aware of the other half of the story and all its details. Hence, the decision of the government officials should be of their judgemnt.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 179, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... out the will of the people they serve. While, other side beileves that the decisions...
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Line 5, column 131, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'publics'' or 'public's'?
Suggestion: publics'; public's
...l and indifferent. For instance, if the publics opinion is highly influenced by a celeb...
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Line 5, column 387, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... the public will even though he/she has a insight about the influence of the cele...
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Line 9, column 239, Rule ID: LETS_LET[1]
Message: Did you mean 'Let's'?
Suggestion: Let's
... and a larger view for decision making. Lets assume that because of monetary crisis ...
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Message: It's never correct to use "of" after a modal verb. Use 'will have'.
Suggestion: will have
... government official clearly knows this will of public will negatively affect the curre...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, if, look, may, so, then, thus, while, for instance, i think
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 24.0 12.4196629213 193% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 33.0505617978 82% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 58.6224719101 72% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 12.9106741573 139% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1821.0 2235.4752809 81% => OK
No of words: 366.0 442.535393258 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97540983607 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37391431897 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61459992351 2.79657885939 93% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 215.323595506 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.486338797814 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 543.6 704.065955056 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.99550561798 180% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 52.2093590701 60.3974514979 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.8421052632 118.986275619 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2631578947 23.4991977007 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.73684210526 5.21951772744 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 10.2758426966 19% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.83258426966 248% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.381112153065 0.243740707755 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.12184363954 0.0831039109588 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.096840762073 0.0758088955206 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.253657650237 0.150359130593 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.140412136661 0.0667264976115 210% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 14.1392134831 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.8420337079 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 12.1639044944 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 100.480337079 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 11.8971910112 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.