Some people believe that government officials must carry out the will of the people they serve. Others believe that officials should base their decisions on their own judgment.
These days, societies are very complex and every government adopts specific policies to reach its goal. In this regard, there is a long-standing discussion among people as to whether government should obey people's wills or decide itself about different issues. I personally, concur with the former. In the following paragraphs, I will delve into the most important reasons.
To begin with, government should keep people pleased and satisfied in order being successful. if governments pay attention to people's will, they can guarantee their development and progress and country's prosperity as a result, as opposed to a situation when governments ignore their citizens’ desires. if governments do not consider people’s will, people may cause disruption in country management by protesting to policies that country have adopted and governments may collapse as a result of rigorous protests and demonstrations. The more attention to people's needs and desires, the more success and prosperity. In this regard, governments should consider people's will if they do not cause disastrous mistakes and backward movement, to the detriment of the country's benefits.
Second of all, people know troubles and difficulties better than governments. people live a normal life with a less welfare than officials do, so they feel life's problems better than officials who have a luxurious life. they encounter with different dilemmas in their daily life such as financial problems and unemployment to name but a few and they can help officials to recognize the major problems in people's life. By doing so, governments can allocate their budgets better to different issues and provide a better life with their citizens.
To sum up, I really believe that governments should consider people in their decisions on the ground that they need people’s satisfaction to make headway and people know problems better than officials do. Hence, should government pay attentions to people’s inclinations, the country can develop as soon as possible.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, if, may, really, second, so, as to, such as, as a result, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 19.5258426966 15% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 33.0505617978 70% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 58.6224719101 63% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1737.0 2235.4752809 78% => OK
No of words: 313.0 442.535393258 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.54952076677 5.05705443957 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20616286096 4.55969084622 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03032070127 2.79657885939 108% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 215.323595506 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.543130990415 0.4932671777 110% => OK
syllable_count: 511.2 704.065955056 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.2711290462 60.3974514979 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.8 118.986275619 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8666666667 23.4991977007 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.26666666667 5.21951772744 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.36301185264 0.243740707755 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.125695822536 0.0831039109588 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0885858050416 0.0758088955206 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.232588888844 0.150359130593 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0790946291941 0.0667264976115 119% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 14.1392134831 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.91 12.1639044944 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 100.480337079 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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