1) If the demand for a live jazz club in Monroe is as large as the applicant's claim, it is likely that Monroe already has one or more clubs.(2) Monroe's annual Jazz Festival and the popularity of the jazz radio program held every night does not necessarily indicate that Jazz is popular with Monroe.(3) Even though jazz is very popular in Monroe, we can not guarantee that those jazz fans will join a jazz club.(4) The mere fact that famous jazz musicians live in Monroe does not support the applicants' claims.(5) As a result of the national survey, we could not guarantee that the residents of Monroe were willing to spend a large amount of money on jazz entertainment.(6) The debater also does not tell how much of the $ 1,000 will join the club.(7) The size of Monroe's Jazz Market and the profitability of the proposed club are unquestionable.
This paragraph adopts the standard argument text segment structure. That is, first the third logic error of the original text is mentioned, then the reason for the logic error is analyzed.
As the third paragraph of the text, the third important logical error committed in this paragraph is the causal error. The original hypothesis is that because there are many jazz musicians in Monroe, their presence improves the profitability of the jazz club C-Note. But in fact, these musicians may not be very inclined to play in local clubs. Therefore, this causality hypothesis about the profitability of musicians and clubs in the original text is unconvincing.
Finally, a national survey that average jazz fans spend $ 1,000 a year on jazz entertainment can only determine if part of this budget can be reliably allocated for entertainment use at a new club , Will decide to support the applicant's claims. .
This paragraph adopts the standard argument text segment structure. That is, first the third logic error of the original text is mentioned, then the reason for the logic error is analyzed.
The fourth important logic error to attack the original text committed in this paragraph as the fourth paragraph of text is the sample type error. In the original text, the national survey is assumed to be equivalent to the local situation. However, this view of the original is unconvincing, as in fact the personal situation in the area may not be so.
In order to do so, a clear evidence must be presented that Monroe residents regularly patronize the C-note. That evidence is that a significant number of Monroe residents are participating Contains statistics that indicate At the annual Jazz Festival, Monroe's jazz radio show fans are convinced that they will go to live jazz if they have the opportunity, and are confident that they will be playing on C-Note from local famous jazz musicians. opportunity
Essay evaluation report
flaws:
the content is not well organized.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 469 350
No. of Characters: 2230 1500
No. of Different Words: 187 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.654 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.755 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.664 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 145 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 106 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 89 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 57 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 29.312 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 22.053 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.688 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.367 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.574 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.125 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 710, Rule ID: CURRENCY_SPACE[1]
Message: The currency mark is usually written without any whitespace: '$1'.
Suggestion: $1
...ater also does not tell how much of the $ 1,000 will join the club.7 The size of Mo...
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Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... the proposed club are unquestionable. This paragraph adopts the standard argum...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...eason for the logic error is analyzed. As the third paragraph of the text, the ...
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Line 6, column 57, Rule ID: CURRENCY_SPACE[1]
Message: The currency mark is usually written without any whitespace: '$1'.
Suggestion: $1
...nal survey that average jazz fans spend $ 1,000 a year on jazz entertainment can on...
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Line 6, column 197, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ated for entertainment use at a new club , Will decide to support the applicants c...
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Line 6, column 245, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...ecide to support the applicants claims. . This paragraph adopts the standard ...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...de to support the applicants claims. . This paragraph adopts the standard argum...
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...eason for the logic error is analyzed. The fourth important logic error to atta...
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Line 11, column 444, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Opportunity
...-Note from local famous jazz musicians. opportunity
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, may, so, then, therefore, third, in fact, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.6327345309 148% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 28.8173652695 108% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 55.5748502994 81% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2288.0 2260.96107784 101% => OK
No of words: 463.0 441.139720559 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94168466523 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63868890866 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73348166511 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 204.123752495 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.416846652268 0.468620217663 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 715.5 705.55239521 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 4.96107784431 242% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 22.8473053892 131% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 186.844248863 57.8364921388 323% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 152.533333333 119.503703932 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.8666666667 23.324526521 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.2 5.70786347227 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 5.15768463074 136% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.183531649748 0.218282227539 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0461281860758 0.0743258471296 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.073681995024 0.0701772020484 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0816669826511 0.128457276422 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0826026142213 0.0628817314937 131% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.3 14.3799401198 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.49 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 12.5979740519 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 98.500998004 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 53.0 12.3882235529 428% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 14.0 11.1389221557 126% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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