The government in Littleville plans to build a large mall in a newly constructed zone just outside the city. Littleville hopes to attract many wealthy clients who it believes will shop at the Littleville Mall's many planned boutique stores.
Ten years ago Bigsburgh, a city in the same province, built an upscale mall in its fashionable downtown district. The mall was an instant success, so Littleville Mall can expect a profit in its first year.
The follwing argument is flawed for numerous reasons. Primarily because the argument is based on the unwarranted assumption that the city of Littleville and Bigsburg are the same, rendering
the main concolusion that Littleville will follow the instant success of Bigsburg mall 10 years ago, invalid.
The argument fails to provide any justification that the two cities are similar. For example, the people of Bigsburg may be more into the fashion thereby Bigsburg saw an instant success.
On the otherhand, people of Littleville need not be very interested in fashion.
The argument also assumes, the locality of malls would not affect the success which is invalid. Because Bigsburg started the mall in the fashionable city and the Littleville is
starting the maill in the constructed zone which is not similar to the fashionable city of Bigsburg. So the LIttleville need not get the similar response as that of Bigsburg.
As Bigsburg had success 10 years ago, the Littleville need not have the same now as the time changes, the interests of the people also change. For example, As the people are
more interested in fashion 10 years ago, they need not have the same undiminished interest now.
The argument also stated Bigsburg incurred an instant success which is vague as the success can be in terms of the people who came to the mall or the revenue or the publicity of the mall.
So it might not be justified to assume that Littleville can get high revenue because of the new mall.
The argument would be strong, if it considers many other parameters like people view on fashion currently, comparision of size of malls in Bigsburg and Littleville,
how similar are people in both the cities, effect of locality on the revenue of the mall.
In conclusion, as the argument makes several warranted assumptions, it fails to make a convincing case that Littleville mall can make the revenue as that of Bigsburg 10 years ago.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: The follwing argument is flawed for numerous reasons.
Error: follwing Suggestion: following
Sentence: Primarily because the argument is based on the unwarranted assumption that the city of Littleville and Bigsburg are the same, rendering the main concolusion that Littleville will follow the instant success of Bigsburg mall 10 years ago, invalid.
Error: concolusion Suggestion: conclusion
Error: unwarranted Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: For example, the people of Bigsburg may be more into the fashion thereby Bigsburg saw an instant success.
Error: may Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: On the otherhand, people of Littleville need not be very interested in fashion.
Error: otherhand Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Because Bigsburg started the mall in the fashionable city and the Littleville is starting the maill in the constructed zone which is not similar to the fashionable city of Bigsburg.
Error: maill Suggestion: mail
Sentence: The argument would be strong, if it considers many other parameters like people view on fashion currently, comparision of size of malls in Bigsburg and Littleville, how similar are people in both the cities, effect of locality on the revenue of the mall.
Error: comparision Suggestion: comparison
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 7 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 325 350
No. of Characters: 1560 1500
No. of Different Words: 131 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.246 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.8 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.678 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 111 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 94 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 59 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 33 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.214 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.407 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.643 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.409 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.73 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.138 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 7 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 190, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...lle and Bigsburg are the same, rendering the main concolusion that Littleville wi...
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Line 7, column 177, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... fashionable city and the Littleville is starting the maill in the constructed zo...
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Line 10, column 174, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...o change. For example, As the people are more interested in fashion 10 years ago,...
^^^
Line 16, column 165, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ze of malls in Bigsburg and Littleville, how similar are people in both the citie...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, may, so, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 11.0 28.8173652695 38% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 55.5748502994 63% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1625.0 2260.96107784 72% => OK
No of words: 325.0 441.139720559 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24591054749 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7445118987 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 134.0 204.123752495 66% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.412307692308 0.468620217663 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 503.1 705.55239521 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.4436072119 57.8364921388 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.071428571 119.503703932 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2142857143 23.324526521 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.21428571429 5.70786347227 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 13.0 5.15768463074 252% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173460422574 0.218282227539 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0729358822353 0.0743258471296 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0503704854049 0.0701772020484 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0834054018567 0.128457276422 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0453197083364 0.0628817314937 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 14.3799401198 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.3550499002 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 12.5979740519 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.69 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 98.500998004 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 12.3882235529 73% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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