The author claims that the cause of extinction of large mammal species in the Kaliko Islands
was not due to humans. Unjustified assumotions, far stretched inferences are some of the flaws
in the argument. Moreover, the thesis is too audacious given the lack of substantial evidence
of the claims made thereof.
Absence of symptom doesn't imply that the cause is not present. The unstated assumption of the
speaker is that as there wasn't any contact of humans with the mammalians as there is no evidence.
Bones of the animals, cave paintings, folk songs mentioning giant animals, footprints etc could evince
signs of the humans interacting with the animal species. Given timeline is 4,000 - 7,000 years ago.
Any evidence, if present possibly might have been effaced with the advent of time. Not having being
discovered doesn't refute the existence of these artifacts. The possibility of excavations and expeditions
unravelling these myesteries, unveiling new discoveries cannot be refuted.
Moreover, attributing the cause of extinction to climate and environmental changes due lack of subtantiation
is a highly tenable claim. It is noted that discards of bones of fish were found. If climate change were really
the cause, the fish might as well have gone extinct. Proper theories of enivronment changes, the mechanisms,
its implications on animal species must be warranted before going any further to the conclusion. Also,
any account of verifiable data on the climate changes during that time period is missing. It might well have
been the case that some other powerful species were the cause of the rapid diminshing of the mammals.
Even more so, a virulent pathogen may have spread in this now extinct mammalian population and have been the
cause. This line of reasoning might seem more potent as a climate change, not only affects terrestrial species,
but also the aquatic animals, possibly to a more menacing extent.
In sum, the unjustified assumptions made by the speaker is too large to be credible. These ad-hoc prejudices open a whole world of debate which impedes the vindication of the argument made itself. Proper validation and careful analysis of these biases has to be made before getting down to the conclusions. For all we know, the past is unclear and the thesis averred, even more.
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: The possibility of excavations and expeditions unravelling these myesteries, unveiling new discoveries cannot be refuted.
Error: unravelling Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: myesteries Suggestion: mysteries
Sentence: Moreover, attributing the cause of extinction to climate and environmental changes due lack of subtantiation is a highly tenable claim.
Error: subtantiation Suggestion: substantiation
Sentence: Proper theories of enivronment changes, the mechanisms, its implications on animal species must be warranted before going any further to the conclusion.
Error: enivronment Suggestion: environment
Sentence: It might well have been the case that some other powerful species were the cause of the rapid diminshing of the mammals.
Error: diminshing Suggestion: diminishing
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flaws:
the arguments are not exactly right on the point. Here goes a sample:
https://www.testbig.com/gmatgre-argument-task-essays/humans-arrived-kal…
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 378 350
No. of Characters: 1878 1500
No. of Different Words: 211 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.409 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.968 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.67 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 137 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 103 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 63 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 44 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.182 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 4.942 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.364 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.271 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.454 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.049 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 78, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...sumotions, far stretched inferences are some of the flaws in the argument. Moreover, the t...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 20, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...ims made thereof. Absence of symptom doesnt imply that the cause is not present. Th...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 26, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wasn't
...mption of the speaker is that as there wasnt any contact of humans with the mammalia...
^^^^^
Line 10, column 100, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ith the advent of time. Not having being discovered doesnt refute the existence o...
^^^
Line 11, column 12, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
... of time. Not having being discovered doesnt refute the existence of these artifacts...
^^^^^^
Line 14, column 109, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...mental changes due lack of subtantiation is a highly tenable claim. It is noted t...
^^^
Line 16, column 109, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... of enivronment changes, the mechanisms, its implications on animal species must ...
^^^
Line 17, column 103, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ing any further to the conclusion. Also, any account of verifiable data on the cl...
^^^
Line 18, column 109, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...me period is missing. It might well have been the case that some other powerful s...
^^^
Line 20, column 109, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t mammalian population and have been the cause. This line of reasoning might seem...
^^^
Line 21, column 112, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e, not only affects terrestrial species, but also the aquatic animals, possibly t...
^^^
Line 25, column 118, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...de itself. Proper validation and careful analysis of these biases has to be made ...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, moreover, really, so, well, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 28.8173652695 59% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 55.5748502994 85% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1972.0 2260.96107784 87% => OK
No of words: 375.0 441.139720559 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.25866666667 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40055868397 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75108522149 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 204.123752495 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.570666666667 0.468620217663 122% => OK
syllable_count: 609.3 705.55239521 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.3735741949 57.8364921388 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 89.6363636364 119.503703932 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0454545455 23.324526521 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.40909090909 5.70786347227 42% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 24.0 5.15768463074 465% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 12.0 5.25449101796 228% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.67664670659 214% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.16058538691 0.218282227539 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0438444358692 0.0743258471296 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0682955670268 0.0701772020484 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0405277053689 0.128457276422 32% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0719312232361 0.0628817314937 114% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 14.3799401198 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.3550499002 112% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.93 12.5979740519 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.2 8.32208582834 111% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 98.500998004 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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