In the given memo appeared in the newsletter of the West Meria Public Health Council, whixh indicates that with the having fish in substantial amount in daily basis will help to prevent from cold which will eventually lower absenteeism. To buttress his/her argument, a study report nearby East Meria has been showned which states that people in that area visit only once or twice per year for the treatment of cold, due to their high consumption of fish. So, they recommended for the daily use of the nutritional supplement to avert from suffering of cold. However, this recommendation can only be evaluated properly if certain quandaries are addressed and explained.
First of all, there are myriad of reasons for the absenteeism of students in school. In other words, there are many students who might be very maverick and indolent regarding their studies so they don't want to attend to school. For example, we all are wary about, one of kind of students who are very lackadaisical and would never do their assignments on time and is only interested in playing games. Those kind of students probably fake being sick and will stay at home. If any of the above point has some merit, than the original argument is enervated.
Secondly, consumption of only one kind of the food that is fish might not be reason of the exiguous amount of people visiting doctor in East Meria. The author prematurely assumes that, with the increase of consumption of the fish there will be no hindrance for attending school and work. Perhaps people of East Meria might be taking care of their diets with some exercise as well and they might have been drinking hot water everyday in order prevent themselves from catching cold. For instance, people might be drinking hot tea and staying warm inside their home and going only at the time of work would probably be the reason for less number of people suffering from cold. If the above is true, then the argument doesn't hold any water.
Lastly, there might be huge difference in number of population in East Meria and West Meria. People in East Meria might be less in number or they might be immune to cold or have been treating cold with home remedies. This would automatically make, less number of people visiting to doctor. For instance, people of East Meria might not be interested in going hospital for the treatment of cold or else they probably don't want to get resistant with the antibiotics prescribed by doctor.
In conclusion, the argument in the newsletter, as it stands now is flawed due to it's reliance on several unwarranted assumptions. If the author is able to offer more pellucid information by giving more explanation to the above quandaries than the proposed recommendation on prevention of colds and lower absenteeism would be viable.
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 8 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 9 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 480 350
No. of Characters: 2263 1500
No. of Different Words: 223 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.681 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.715 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.558 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 136 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 96 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 82 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 47 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.182 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.31 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.31 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.101 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 197, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ndolent regarding their studies so they dont want to attend to school. For example, ...
^^^^
Line 2, column 401, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'Those kinds'?
Suggestion: This kind; Those kinds
...nd is only interested in playing games. Those kind of students probably fake being sick an...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 514, Rule ID: COMMA_THAN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'then'?
Suggestion: then
... any of the above point has some merit, than the original argument is enervated. Se...
^^^^
Line 3, column 424, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...they might have been drinking hot water everyday in order prevent themselves from catchi...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 714, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...If the above is true, then the argument doesnt hold any water. Lastly, there might be...
^^^^^^
Line 4, column 123, Rule ID: ADJECTIVE_IN_ATTRIBUTE[1]
Message: A more concise phrase may lose no meaning and sound more powerful.
Suggestion: less
...st Meria. People in East Meria might be less in number or they might be immune to cold or have...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 415, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...treatment of cold or else they probably dont want to get resistant with the antibiot...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, lastly, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.6327345309 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.9520958084 139% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 78.0 55.5748502994 140% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 16.3942115768 128% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2310.0 2260.96107784 102% => OK
No of words: 476.0 441.139720559 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85294117647 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67091256922 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60784953078 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 204.123752495 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.478991596639 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 709.2 705.55239521 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.7 57.8364921388 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.5 119.503703932 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8 23.324526521 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.85 5.70786347227 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.187588480457 0.218282227539 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0651500773132 0.0743258471296 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0777807869443 0.0701772020484 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105685083127 0.128457276422 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0595007679004 0.0628817314937 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 14.3799401198 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.3550499002 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 12.5979740519 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.8 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 98.500998004 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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