The self-definition comes primarily through interaction with other people not through self-observation, independent thinking and introspection. This claim overemphasize the roles of social activities on an individual development and negates the subjective definition. I certainly believe that interaction with social groups reflects our personality to some extent and embodies our present mental state in some ways, but a person’s existing social presence neither could define a person’s character thoroughly nor should impede their future anticipation.
Firstly, I do agree that the social interaction do help in the development of one’s character. This statement serves like a mirror which can say our current state and project a big image of the group to which we belong. Although Chinese emperor Taizong used to say that using friends as a mirror people discern their interests and faults. In fact, our friends play important role in our identification as we spend more time with the people who share same values and perception. For example, People who loves wearing branded clothes and shoes would be friends with the one who loves similar things rather than with someone who believes in simplicity. Furthermore, this common point draw a big picture of this group. For instance, the appealing appearances of financial consultants reflects their dependence on external images on judging people, accentuates their attention to physical world. On Contrary, wearing style of minimalism leading by Mark Zuckerberg reflects the coders indifference to the external images and physical attention to the world. However, common points of same social group are too vague to determine someone’s personality precisely and insightfully.
Secondly self-founding is a complicated journey in itself with full of surprises. In addition to social interactions there are multiple things that could help us in the process of self-definition. One of the most important thing we must try to push ourselves beyond our limitations. For example, reading novel and watching movies are a good way. Inspired by the words of Oscar Wilde that “We live in the world of gutter with some of us looking at stars”, I want to become person of idealism and refuse to conform the current social consumerism and idealism. Furthermore, from the book of Shakespeare I have discovered my spirit of sacrifice to love. However, we are all inspired by books, movies, poems in one in another way at some point of our life.
Thirdly, the word ‘primarily’ in the claim emphasizes the role of outer world in development of your identification rather than inner world. However, ego founding and self-defining is a personal approach and relates fundamentally to the person’s experiences and motivation. When some universities ask students to read list of books every one of them would have their own perception for those books. For example, Me and my sister have totally different path although, we grew up with same environment, knowledge and same group of people around us. Hence, these example illustrates that self-identification is determined by inner world and experiences rather than outer world.
To recapitulate, identification with social groups helps to form an abstract view of who we are. However, to form a precise and sensitive self-definition is a tortuous process which requires constant confrontation with the realities, non-stop retrospection and gradual formation of inner world.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 156, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'overemphasizes'.
Suggestion: overemphasizes
... thinking and introspection. This claim overemphasize the roles of social activities on an in...
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Line 2, column 972, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'coders'' or 'coder's'?
Suggestion: coders'; coder's
...leading by Mark Zuckerberg reflects the coders indifference to the external images and...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, for example, for instance, in addition, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.5258426966 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 14.8657303371 148% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 33.0505617978 136% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 80.0 58.6224719101 136% => OK
Nominalization: 32.0 12.9106741573 248% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2939.0 2235.4752809 131% => OK
No of words: 538.0 442.535393258 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.46282527881 5.05705443957 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81610080973 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.20513851418 2.79657885939 115% => OK
Unique words: 289.0 215.323595506 134% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53717472119 0.4932671777 109% => OK
syllable_count: 906.3 704.065955056 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.3838357526 60.3974514979 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.038461538 118.986275619 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6923076923 23.4991977007 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.57692307692 5.21951772744 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.232621254931 0.243740707755 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0602005029958 0.0831039109588 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0455054449049 0.0758088955206 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13564506255 0.150359130593 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0266097371718 0.0667264976115 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 14.1392134831 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.8420337079 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.39 12.1639044944 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.97 8.38706741573 107% => OK
difficult_words: 148.0 100.480337079 147% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.8971910112 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.83 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.25 Out of 6
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