An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet. Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The decision of the government of Tagus to promote the new millet type in order to combat vitamin A deficiency is appreciated but the effectiveness of this decision is questionable subject to the content provided to us.
First of all, seeds of the new type of millet cost more and though subsidies would be provided to the farmers for growing these, we are not given any information of how much these subsidies could cut down the cost of seeds. It might be that even after getting subsidies on the cost of the seeds for the new millet type, farmers found the price to high and would not be encouraged to grow this new variety. If we knew the amount of subsidy provided and actual cost of seeds, we could conclude whether farmers would resort to growing these new variety of millet or not.
Even if farmers started to grow these new variety of millet, we cannot say whether people would start purchasing these. There are two reasons for this. First is that, the passage specifies that Tagus was an impoverished nation. So, as we do not have any clue of what could be the selling price of the new millet variety, we cannot establish the ability of people to buy these. Second reason is that, the passage makes an assumption, that since millet already was a staple food in Tagus, people would readily adopt the new variety. Now, if people like one variety of mango, it is not necessary that they will like the other variety of mango also. Similarly, the assumption of people liking one variety of millet would result in their liking of the other type as well is not impressive.
Another thing is that, there is no basis in the passage which tells us why only the new variety of millet was chosen to be a vitamin A supplement for eradicating this deficiency. Did the government look for other options and could not find any other cheaper vitamin A supplement than the new millet type or did they not bother for even identifying other options.
If we had answers to each of the above stated questions and clarity for the basis of the assumptions, we could support the government's recommendation in bringing about the predicted result. But, since the recommendation consists of several unwarranted assumptions, it fails to establish a convincing case.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
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argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- OK. for example, maybe people do not like the taste.
argument 3 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 395 350
No. of Characters: 1815 1500
No. of Different Words: 170 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.458 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.595 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.527 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 118 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 85 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 43 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 35 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.333 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.463 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.867 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.377 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.621 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.221 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 641, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...ey will like the other variety of mango also. Similarly, the assumption of people li...
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Line 9, column 124, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'governments'' or 'government's'?
Suggestion: governments'; government's
...f the assumptions, we could support the governments recommendation in bringing about the pr...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, second, similarly, so, well, another thing, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 28.8173652695 115% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 55.5748502994 94% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1863.0 2260.96107784 82% => OK
No of words: 395.0 441.139720559 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.7164556962 5.12650576532 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56979609051 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 204.123752495 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.458227848101 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 585.0 705.55239521 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.3029047096 57.8364921388 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.2 119.503703932 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.3333333333 23.324526521 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.6 5.70786347227 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.372726646661 0.218282227539 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.132731070298 0.0743258471296 179% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0810510589419 0.0701772020484 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.195044749067 0.128457276422 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.093037609601 0.0628817314937 148% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 14.3799401198 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 48.3550499002 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 12.5979740519 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 98.500998004 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 12.3882235529 149% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 11.9071856287 160% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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