The nation of Tagus is suffering a vitamin A deficiency amongst its people. The author writes about how the international development organization has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A and how the government of Tagus is trying to promote its citizen to buy the new variety and consume it. The author covered the news but there are few questions which need to be discussed before asserting that this approach of the new type of millet seed would work or not.
As the author said that the new seeds cost a more and the farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety but there lies one question, will the farmers plant the new seed honestly? As the farmers might mix the new seeds with regular seed so as to maximize their profit and slowly there might come a time that the plantation of regular seeds might be in the highest proportion as to the new seeds, which maximize the farmers' profit but it fails the goal of the government.
Second question, will the people of the impoverished nation of Tagus buy these new seeds? As stated, it is an impoverished nation and people might not have the money to buy the new type of seeds for a long run. The people of Tagus might buy the new seeds in the beginning and later realize that cost of the new type of seeds is not fitting in their monthly budget so they have no choice but to revert to the regular seeds. Even if the government is strictly controlling the sale of the seeds, the people will resort to actions which will get them the regular seeds.
The crucial question is what the government of Tagus will do to promote the new type of seeds. The government might promote the benefits of the new seeds or also give subsidies for buying and consuming it, but as it is an impoverished nation they'll have to think of the budget required in the process and will revert their promotion if it is getting too expensive to promote and give subsidies to farmers and the citizen of Tagus.
For the programme to be a success the government should ensure the citizen it is not that expensive to fit it into their budget. They should also ensure that the farmers won't unfairly take money for the new seeds while selling the regular seeds, the government should ensure the plantation is only of the new seeds and there is no unfair practice going on. Lastly, they should take the help of international development organization and should request to make new seeds more affordable so that every citizen purchases the new seeds without thinking its price.
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- not OK
argument 2 -- not OK
argument 3 -- not exactly
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 456 350
No. of Characters: 2044 1500
No. of Different Words: 163 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.621 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.482 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.407 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 129 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 89 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 50 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 37 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 32.571 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.605 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.643 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.457 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.688 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.238 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 307, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... to buy the new variety and consume it. The author covered the news but there are f...
^^^
Line 3, column 250, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...ght mix the new seeds with regular seed so as to maximize their profit and slowly there ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 243, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: they'll
...it, but as it is an impoverished nation theyll have to think of the budget required in...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, honestly, if, lastly, second, so, while, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.9520958084 154% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 11.1786427146 170% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 55.5748502994 86% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2079.0 2260.96107784 92% => OK
No of words: 454.0 441.139720559 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.57929515419 5.12650576532 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61598047577 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4363195068 2.78398813304 88% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 204.123752495 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.376651982379 0.468620217663 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 638.1 705.55239521 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 22.8473053892 140% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 74.0989754535 57.8364921388 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 148.5 119.503703932 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.4285714286 23.324526521 139% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.07142857143 5.70786347227 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.446577987453 0.218282227539 205% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.176315732567 0.0743258471296 237% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0719260496466 0.0701772020484 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.252209913348 0.128457276422 196% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0690427000726 0.0628817314937 110% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 14.3799401198 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.92 48.3550499002 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.88 12.5979740519 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.52 8.32208582834 90% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 98.500998004 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 11.1389221557 133% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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