An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet
In the given argument author states that government should run every possible means to promote the new type of millet, recently discovered, which contains high vitamin A. To support the conclusion authors provides various evidence such as there is vitamin A deficiency in that reason, newly engineered millet contains more vitamin than other and farmer there will pay high cost of newly engineered millet. At first glance, these evidence seem to buttress the conclusion. But after the meticulous examination author is unsuccessful to maintain various indispensible factors and raises the skeptical question about it. thus author's conclusion is logically incomplete for the following reasons.
First of author cites that an international organization has engineered new millet which claims that new breed has more vitamin A than other. Does this claim really hold it truth? To really prove such claim further investigation and further evidence may be necessary. Newly discovered breed may be harmful in other way even though it may contain rich vitamin A. Or it may lack other kinds of nutrients as other millet. If either of situation holds true, then this claim may not be justifiable.
Another assumption presented here is local farmer will pay for new type of millet. Farmer may be basically poor and destitute and can not afford the new millet. Even, those who can afford they may not be willing to renounce the traditional breed. or they may not be assure to use new type of millet. Then in such case also promotion of new breed may be difficult task.
We know that it is very complex and difficult task to change people's normal habit. So the assumption presented here that millet is staple in that reason and people radially accept the new variety of millet. but this assumption also has not reasonable validity. people are accustomed to their own verity new verity may not be tasty or fully creditable to eat by people.
Another fact presented here id to combat the vitamin A deficiency new variety of millet is promoted. this may not be true to combat vitamin A government may create various awareness program for people to take other kinds of vitamin source rather than new millet.
In conclusion author's argument is rife with hole and flaws. To make it more plausible and reliable more evidence and detailed analysis about new breed of millet is required. If the above evidence are fulfilled then it may hold true otherwise this argument is open to debate and logically not convincing.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 416 350
No. of Characters: 2049 1500
No. of Different Words: 196 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.516 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.925 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.572 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 152 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 103 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 76 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 49 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.111 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 15.033 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.833 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.341 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.599 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.108 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...incomplete for the following reasons. First of author cites that an internatio...
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...hen this claim may not be justifiable. Another assumption presented here is loc...
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Suggestion: Or
...ling to renounce the traditional breed. or they may not be assure to use new type ...
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...on of new breed may be difficult task. We know that it is very complex and diff...
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Suggestion: But
...ially accept the new variety of millet. but this assumption also has not reasonable...
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Suggestion: People
...ption also has not reasonable validity. people are accustomed to their own verity new ...
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Suggestion: This
...ency new variety of millet is promoted. this may not be true to combat vitamin A gov...
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...vitamin source rather than new millet. In conclusion authors argument is rife w...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, really, so, then, thus, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.9520958084 139% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 11.1786427146 143% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 55.5748502994 72% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2087.0 2260.96107784 92% => OK
No of words: 416.0 441.139720559 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01682692308 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51620172871 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.617865719 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 204.123752495 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.475961538462 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 665.1 705.55239521 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 0.0 8.76447105788 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 19.7664670659 126% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.8473053892 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.3692506135 57.8364921388 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.48 119.503703932 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.64 23.324526521 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.92 5.70786347227 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.407880491313 0.218282227539 187% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119108800123 0.0743258471296 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100025410615 0.0701772020484 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.222687733464 0.128457276422 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0618832901647 0.0628817314937 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 14.3799401198 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 48.3550499002 114% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.54 12.5979740519 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.69 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 98.500998004 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.1389221557 75% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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