An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The arguments states that the state of tagus has high deficiency of vitamin A among its citizens and government should not be dormant on this issue. To tackle this, researchers have developed a new breed of millet which contains high amount of vitamin A. it further states that even though the price of such seeds are high, subsidies can be given to promote their harvesting. there are several unanswered questions in the argument which will decide the success of this policy. They will be discussed one by one in next few paragraphs.
The main flaw in the argument is the absence of any statistical data. it just states the deficiency of vitamin A among the people without any numbers to actually quantify it. it may be the case that the people are deficient in certain vitamin because of their faulty lifestyle or improper diet. In this case, it may be more viable to improve the diet rather than supplanting it with other diet. also, statistics about yield of the farm is not given. it is possible that the yield is far too less to effectively satiate need of every citizen and in such a situation, the mentioned proposal will fail.
Other unanswered question is related to the funding for the subsidies planned to the farmers. it is already stated that tagus is impoverished nation, so the government can obviously not incorporate the burden to include such an ambitious scheme in their budget. rather, if it is to be financed by any international community, the draft of monetory requirements and funding is very important for the successful implementation of the scheme.
it is also assumed in the argument that people will readily accept new type of millet in their diet as ordinary millet is already their staple food. But this argument can only be supported if there is no discernible change in the quality and the cost of the new millet produced. For example, if the taste of this millet is different than that of ordinary one, then, the implementation of the scheme might involve resistance from the people in accepting the new diet.
Finally, the whole argument is based on the assumption that tagus will successfully produce the new engineered millet that might have been produced and tested somewhere else as it is "international organisation" which is responsible in its development. there is no reason provided in the argument to accept that it can be successfully grown in the concerned area.
So, it can be concluded from the above paragraphs that there are many unattended questions whose answers have been readily assumed in the given argument and the success of the scheme will depend on the positive answers of the mentioned questions.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 452 350
No. of Characters: 2167 1500
No. of Different Words: 206 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.611 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.794 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.711 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 153 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 115 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 78 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 55 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 41.091 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 17.485 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.727 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.387 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.741 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.086 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 15, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[1]
Message: You should probably use 'state'.
Suggestion: state
The arguments states that the state of tagus has high defici...
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Line 1, column 377, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: There
...n be given to promote their harvesting. there are several unanswered questions in the...
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Line 7, column 71, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...is the absence of any statistical data. it just states the deficiency of vitamin A...
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Line 7, column 396, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Also
...er than supplanting it with other diet. also, statistics about yield of the farm is ...
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Line 7, column 451, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...s about yield of the farm is not given. it is possible that the yield is far too l...
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Line 13, column 95, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...r the subsidies planned to the farmers. it is already stated that tagus is impover...
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Line 13, column 263, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Rather
...ch an ambitious scheme in their budget. rather, if it is to be financed by any interna...
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Line 19, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...l implementation of the scheme. it is also assumed in the argument that pe...
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Line 19, column 334, Rule ID: RATHER_THEN[2]
Message: Did you mean 'different 'from''? 'Different than' is often considered colloquial style.
Suggestion: from
...f the taste of this millet is different than that of ordinary one, then, the impleme...
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Line 21, column 264, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: There
...hich is responsible in its development. there is no reason provided in the argument t...
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Line 27, column 248, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ive answers of the mentioned questions.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, finally, if, may, so, then, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 32.0 19.6327345309 163% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 28.8173652695 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 55.5748502994 104% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2256.0 2260.96107784 100% => OK
No of words: 452.0 441.139720559 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99115044248 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61088837703 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84701677941 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 204.123752495 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.473451327434 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 716.4 705.55239521 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.1306521298 57.8364921388 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.8 119.503703932 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6 23.324526521 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 5.70786347227 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.25449101796 209% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.20758483034 158% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.366401204587 0.218282227539 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.09912389788 0.0743258471296 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0793542769061 0.0701772020484 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164277867859 0.128457276422 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.089758294496 0.0628817314937 143% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.3799401198 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 12.5979740519 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 98.500998004 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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