An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The statement eagerly claims that the issue of vitamin A deficiency can be easily solved by the the newly engineered millet which seems to be vitamin rich. There is a condition mentioned by the author that people will for sure adopt this new product as it is their staple food. The verdict as tempting as it seems to be fails to provide answers to many vital questions without which it is just vague to come to any conclusion.
First the author never bother about mentioning that will this new millet be suitable to masses. What if it turns to affecting negatively to the majority or fails to adjust with their metabolism. Weather this product was tested on sufficient and varied rannge of people to ensure its result along with the safety. Author also does not throw any light on the fact that could Tangus, the impoverished nation afford this costly product and if yes then how many. As if it out of reach of majority then it won't be effective in fighting the national vitamin A deficiency.
Farmers are to be paid subsidies for cultivating the millet but no confirmation has been taken form the side of the farmers whether they agree for so. If the farmers are unwilling to work accordingly then it belies the claim of author there and then. For an instance let us assume that the farmers are all set to produce this new millet then what is the assurance that the soil of the nation fosters the crop. It is highly probable that the soil and environment is unfavorable for the crop thus debunking the vision the vision of the author.
Another biased ground for author's conclusion is his confidence in the fact the crowd of nation will get adopted to the crop but he has nowhere mentioned that actually how many people of Tangus actually like millet and hence those who turn had been avoiding millet from a long will continue to do so thus doing nothing to cure the deficiency. Also it has never been found that what is the main reason for this deficiency. If it would have had the it would have been easy to hit that cause directly.
Thus with so many possibilities lest undiscovered the author's conclusion is vague and open to criticism.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 385 350
No. of Characters: 1741 1500
No. of Different Words: 198 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.43 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.522 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.398 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 113 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 71 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 48 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 33 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.062 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.727 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.309 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.57 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.076 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 93, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...in A deficiency can be easily solved by the the newly engineered millet which seems to ...
^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 93, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...in A deficiency can be easily solved by the the newly engineered millet which seems to ...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 459, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ostly product and if yes then how many. As if it out of reach of majority then it ...
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Line 5, column 364, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...is new millet then what is the assurance that the soil of the nation fosters the ...
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Line 5, column 507, Rule ID: PHRASE_REPETITION[1]
Message: This phrase is duplicated. You should probably leave only 'the vision'.
Suggestion: the vision
...unfavorable for the crop thus debunking the vision the vision of the author. Another biased ground...
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Line 7, column 343, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...s doing nothing to cure the deficiency. Also it has never been found that what is th...
^^^^
Line 7, column 428, Rule ID: IF_WOULD_HAVE_VBN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'had had'?
Suggestion: had had
... main reason for this deficiency. If it would have had the it would have been easy to hit that...
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Line 7, column 443, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'the' or 'it'?
Suggestion: the; it
...r this deficiency. If it would have had the it would have been easy to hit that cause ...
^^^^^^
Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...been easy to hit that cause directly. Thus with so many possibilities lest undisco...
^^^^
Line 9, column 55, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...any possibilities lest undiscovered the authors conclusion is vague and open to critici...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, actually, also, but, first, hence, if, so, then, thus
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 28.8173652695 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 55.5748502994 76% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1765.0 2260.96107784 78% => OK
No of words: 384.0 441.139720559 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.59635416667 5.12650576532 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4267276788 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44116839119 2.78398813304 88% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 204.123752495 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5078125 0.468620217663 108% => OK
syllable_count: 551.7 705.55239521 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.7545761846 57.8364921388 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.3125 119.503703932 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0 23.324526521 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.125 5.70786347227 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.221538116578 0.218282227539 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0687230397098 0.0743258471296 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0579406003929 0.0701772020484 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111128389711 0.128457276422 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0623074896163 0.0628817314937 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 14.3799401198 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 48.3550499002 132% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.7 12.5979740519 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 98.500998004 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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