An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
The argument states that an international development organization has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A in response to vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus.First of all the argument didnt provide any valid evidence or statistics mentioning the population,income status or the areas that are most affected by this deficiency.There are vitamin tablets and fruits that are rich in vitamin A that can used to get over this deficiency but the author didnt consider other factors that might have helped too.
The author also fails to recognize if other measures had been taken before or not,or if those measures had worked or not.The argument further states that the millet seeds cost more but the farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety.Not everyone are affected with vitamin A deficiency,those who arent affected might develop vitaminosis from excess consumption of vitamins.And millet being the staple food of Tagus means that the new breed will provide vitamin A whether people need it or not. The argument fails to fill in blanks as to how many people are affected or the severity of deficiency in that area.
The government can take other measures too other than funding the new millet breed such as import fruits rich in vitamin A such as pomegranate ,mangoes,plant vegetables that are rich too such as carrots,papaya or promote campaigns that encourage people to take vitamin tablets or supplements ,its not necessary to just focus on millet as there are other options too but the author fails to discriminate such possiblities and
draws conclusion on mere assumptions.
Such vague assumptions highly invalidates the hypothesis made by the author.The case would have been in favor of the author if he had provided valid evidences mentioning the severity of people affected with this deficiency or if he had provided further information that people in Tagus had adopted all means to tackle the problem but failed and hence this new measure is taken.But since such important information are missing we cannot draw conclusion on such insufficient informations.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, so, as to, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 11.1786427146 170% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 55.5748502994 68% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1803.0 2260.96107784 80% => OK
No of words: 345.0 441.139720559 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22608695652 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3097767484 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00800025473 2.78398813304 108% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 204.123752495 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.498550724638 0.468620217663 106% => OK
syllable_count: 576.0 705.55239521 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 19.7664670659 25% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 69.0 22.8473053892 302% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 157.654051645 57.8364921388 273% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 360.6 119.503703932 302% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 69.0 23.324526521 296% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 12.2 5.70786347227 214% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 19.0 5.25449101796 362% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.367097112587 0.218282227539 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.187370930787 0.0743258471296 252% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.123804338953 0.0701772020484 176% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.176172263499 0.128457276422 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.13562133073 0.0628817314937 216% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 37.7 14.3799401198 262% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -7.02 48.3550499002 -15% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 17.1 7.1628742515 239% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 31.4 12.197005988 257% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 14.24 12.5979740519 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.67 8.32208582834 128% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 98.500998004 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 30.0 12.3882235529 242% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 29.6 11.1389221557 266% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 30.0 11.9071856287 252% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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