An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
In this sophicasted world, maintaining your health and intake of balanced diet plays an important role to sustain throughout the daily activities and keep us mentally as well as physically fit. The prompt suggests that, in response to vitamin A deficiency, a new breed of millet which is high in vitamin A. While the new type of seeds are expensive, farmers will be paid subsidies to grow them. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will adopt to it and thus, government will do everything to promote this new type of millet. In my opinion, I do not agree with the prompt and all the following questions need to be answered before coming to any kind of conclusion.
To maintain a balanced diet, we need to consume a variety of food and supplements to help us remain in shape and habitually fit. According to prompt, solely focusing on vitamin A, would not help to maintain the balance and thus, leading to even more spread of viral disease and leading to major endemic. To prevent this the government should focus equally on all kind of food supplements and vegetables to promote healthy living and not entirely on the new variety of millet.
As the new variety of millet is more costly, will the farmers be able to take the risk of growing this new variety? Even after providing subsidies, will the farmers be able to cope up with the expenses of fertilizers or any other kind of product needed to grow the new variety? Also, can the new variety be grown on the same farm land on which the old variety was grown and what would be the efficacy of the new crop that it will grow and can be sold to earn profits. Before coming to any type of conclusion, all these questions need to be answered.
Additionally, no evidence of proof is provided that the new variety will surely help to cope up with the vitamin A deficiency of Tagus. Will this new variety be safe for consumption and have no allergic reaction or any kind of side effects? Also, promoting this new variety will need some substantial proof and evidence of its success before any kind of promotion to be done.
In conclusion, totally depending on the promotion of new variety will not help to handle the deficiency and need a more substential plan to implement this new variety of plant and all the above questions need to be answered.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 415 350
No. of Characters: 1861 1500
No. of Different Words: 182 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.513 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.484 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.486 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 122 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 96 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 57 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 38 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 27.667 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.944 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.733 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.392 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.614 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.139 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 456, Rule ID: ADOPT_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'adapt to'?
Suggestion: adapt to
...ady a staple food in Tagus, people will adopt to it and thus, government will do everyth...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, so, thus, well, while, in conclusion, kind of, as well as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.9520958084 162% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 11.1786427146 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 13.6137724551 37% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 74.0 55.5748502994 133% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1910.0 2260.96107784 84% => OK
No of words: 415.0 441.139720559 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.60240963855 5.12650576532 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51348521516 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55638007965 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 204.123752495 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.44578313253 0.468620217663 95% => OK
syllable_count: 605.7 705.55239521 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.22255489022 213% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.6502243687 57.8364921388 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.375 119.503703932 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.9375 23.324526521 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.875 5.70786347227 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.348597254091 0.218282227539 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.138839289101 0.0743258471296 187% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0987032742557 0.0701772020484 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.20843272198 0.128457276422 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0985253903619 0.0628817314937 157% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.3799401198 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.3550499002 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.7 12.5979740519 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 98.500998004 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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