An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
In the preceding statement, the author claims that the government of Tagus should promote the new millet to combat the vitamin A deficiency. The reasoning provided for this claim is that an engineered new breed millet high in Vitamin A is invented and since it is already a staple food in Tagus, it will be readily accepted by natives. Moreover, to compensate the high cost of seeds farmers will be paid subsidies. Though this claim may also have merit, the author presents a poorly reasoned argument, based on several questionable premises and assumptions, and solely based on the evidence the author offers, we cannot accept his argument as valid.
The primary issue with the author's reasoning lies in his unsubstantiated premises. The author asserts the new engineered breed of millet is high in vitamin A. But he does not mention whether the consumer will be able to assimilate this high vitamin A with good efficiency or not. It is possible that a food is high in some vitamin but due to further complicacy in its type and biomolecular structure, the consumer is unable to assimilate it effectively in the body. The author's premises, the basis for his argument, lack any legitimate evidentary support and render his conclusion inevidentary.
In addition, the author makes several assumptions that remain unproven. Firstly, he assumes that millet being the staple food, its altered breed will also be accepted by consumers. In this assumption, author has not considered the other factors like cost of new millet, taste of new millet, etc. to determine the acceptability of the new breed millet. Secondly, author assumes the government will do everything to promote new millet because it will help to combat Vitamin A deficiency. But it also possible that government has other more important issues also to work upon and they may not have allotted budget for subsidies on new breed millet farming. The author weakens his argument by making assumptions and failing to provide explication of the links between the vitamin A deficiency among citizens and their goverment's plan to combat it he assumes exists.
In sum, the author's illogical argument is based on unsupported premises and unsubstantiated assumptions that render his conclusion invalid. The author failed to imply that a high Vitamin A food would also be effectively assimilated in the body. The assumption of acceptability of new breed just because the old form was a staple food is also invalid. And the assumption of government's best intent to cure Vitamin A deficiency is also a fallacy. If the author truely hopes to change his readers' minds on the issue, he would have to largely restructure his argument, fix the flaws in his logic, clearly explicate his assumptions, and provide evidentary support. Withou these things, his poorly reasoned argument will likely convince few people.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 11 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 468 350
No. of Characters: 2344 1500
No. of Different Words: 204 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.651 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.009 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.781 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 183 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 133 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 89 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 56 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.4 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.969 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.6 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.359 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.503 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.155 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 301, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'food'.
Suggestion: food
... efficiency or not. It is possible that a food is high in some vitamin but due to furt...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 479, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[1]
Message: You should probably use 'premise'.
Suggestion: premise
...it effectively in the body. The authors premises, the basis for his argument, lack any l...
^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 374, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'governments the best'.
Suggestion: governments the best
... is also invalid. And the assumption of governments best intent to cure Vitamin A deficiency is ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 28.8173652695 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 55.5748502994 95% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2394.0 2260.96107784 106% => OK
No of words: 468.0 441.139720559 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11538461538 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65116196802 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85033765028 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 204.123752495 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.450854700855 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 768.6 705.55239521 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.76447105788 148% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.67365269461 299% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.1776184013 57.8364921388 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.818181818 119.503703932 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2727272727 23.324526521 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.59090909091 5.70786347227 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.20758483034 171% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.335048023103 0.218282227539 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.12545945989 0.0743258471296 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.110531609744 0.0701772020484 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.232767039842 0.128457276422 181% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0957131650753 0.0628817314937 152% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 14.3799401198 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.5979740519 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 98.500998004 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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