The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition
The topic raises a controversial issue of whether instilling a sense of cooperation rather than competition among youngsters of the society is the best way to prepare them for the leadership role in various sectors. The author's opinion is that cooperation is essential while competition is not. In my opinion, the sense of competition is also necessary for the leadership role capability among youngsters. I majorly disagree with the author's opinion and will argue that instilling a sense of competition is also very necessary for leadership roles assumed by the young generation in various fields.
Firstly, I will like to my argument with the help of an example. In the central government of India, recently, few changes in the ministries allocation were implemented by the PM. The union health minister was replaced acknowledging the mismanagement after the covid second wave. This kind of strict decision has instilled a feeling of competition in the present incumbent minister that he has to derive results otherwise the high command will look for other better office bearers. The example proves the importance of competition and how competition can inspire improvisations and betterment.
Further, I will use an example from the corporate world. Elon musk is a competitor of Jeff Bezos in space-related ventures. This competition is inspiring both of them to do better which is resulting in further enhanced results for the service of mankind. If this competition was not present and replaced by just cooperation, then certainly they would not have pushed themselves this much for the dominance in the venture. This example highlights the importance of competition on the results in the corporate world.
However, in some cases, this may not be true. In NGOs of great importance, there is no requirement of competition and it should be replaced with cooperation to fulfill the collective goal. Someone can argue that cooperation is also an essential quality for a leadership role in all the offices including government, industries, etc. I agree with it but I believe it will be wrong to say that competitive skills are less important.
In conclusion, I believe in almost every field, competitive skills are also very important for the progress and development in the work so, this is also a required skill among the youngsters. To support my argument, the two examples are taken from two prominent work fields of government and the corporate world. This example explicates the importance of instilling competitive skills among youngsters without limiting the importance of cooperative skills. However, there can be some exemptions also to the argument presented depending upon the leadership roles in specific work areas.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ration in various fields. Firstly, I will like to my argument with the help of an...
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... of India, recently, few changes in the ministries allocation were implemented by the PM. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, look, may, second, so, still, then, while, as to, in conclusion, kind of, in my opinion, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 33.0505617978 91% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 58.6224719101 106% => OK
Nominalization: 34.0 12.9106741573 263% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2306.0 2235.4752809 103% => OK
No of words: 435.0 442.535393258 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30114942529 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56690854021 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07028685662 2.79657885939 110% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 215.323595506 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.487356321839 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 729.0 704.065955056 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.1750082667 60.3974514979 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.818181818 118.986275619 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7727272727 23.4991977007 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.45454545455 5.21951772744 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.313020989577 0.243740707755 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0839340746113 0.0831039109588 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0876609917702 0.0758088955206 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167883324755 0.150359130593 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.10366556529 0.0667264976115 155% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.1392134831 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 48.8420337079 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.46 12.1639044944 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 100.480337079 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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