An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
The people in Tagus are suffering from a deficiency of Vitamin A, thus to combat this deficiency , an international development organisation has made a new breed of millet which is high in Vitamin A. The new breed is developed with the assumption that the people in Tagus will readily adopt this change in millet as millet is the staple food in Tagus and this will help reducing the Vitamin A deficiency in the people.
There are a lot of assumptions that the argument failed to consider. The new breed millet seeds are costly than the normal seeds and farmers will be given subsidies for farming the new variety of the seeds. The author assumes that the farmer will agree to grow the new breed. The author does not compare the cost of growing the new breed with the old breed of millet even after providing subsidies to the farmers. The cost of growing the new breed may exceed the earlier one making farmer disinterested in growing the new breed of millet.It is also assumed that the new breed of millet does not require any special conditions in terms of weather, water or manure requirements and can be grown under the same conditions as the old millet seeds.
In regards with the consumer of the finished millet products, the author assumes that the consumer will readily adopt to this new change in millet. The argument fails to consider the impact of new improvised millet on the rates of the millet. Due to the increased rates of the millet, it may be possible that people will still favor to buy the old millet. Also, there may be chances that the new engineered millet may taste different than the previous one. This can impact a lot, as millet being the staple food, most of the people will be habitual with its taste and it may a possibility that people would not like the new taste.
To conclude, the argument have some serious flaws and make a lot of assumptions to conclude that the Vitamin A deficiency can be cured using the new breed of millet. The government can run a experiment on the sample population to find out the people inclinations towards the new improvised millet and then conclude on the basis of the experiment about the impact of the new millet.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 97, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...itamin A, thus to combat this deficiency , an international development organisati...
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Line 1, column 371, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[5]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to reduce' or 'reduce'.
Suggestion: to reduce; reduce
...staple food in Tagus and this will help reducing the Vitamin A deficiency in the people....
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Line 3, column 277, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...armer will agree to grow the new breed. The author does not compare the cost of gro...
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Line 3, column 415, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ter providing subsidies to the farmers. The cost of growing the new breed may excee...
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Line 3, column 539, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: It
...sted in growing the new breed of millet.It is also assumed that the new breed of m...
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Line 5, column 113, Rule ID: ADOPT_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'adapt to'?
Suggestion: adapt to
... assumes that the consumer will readily adopt to this new change in millet. The argument...
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Line 5, column 435, Rule ID: RATHER_THEN[2]
Message: Did you mean 'different 'from''? 'Different than' is often considered colloquial style.
Suggestion: from
...w engineered millet may taste different than the previous one. This can impact a lot...
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Line 7, column 190, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...breed of millet. The government can run a experiment on the sample population to ...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'still', 'then', 'thus']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.271844660194 0.25644967241 106% => OK
Verbs: 0.152912621359 0.15541462614 98% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0873786407767 0.0836205057962 104% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0266990291262 0.0520304965353 51% => OK
Pronouns: 0.00728155339806 0.0272364105082 27% => Some pronouns wanted.
Prepositions: 0.133495145631 0.125424944231 106% => OK
Participles: 0.0461165048544 0.0416121511921 111% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.46047519771 2.79052419416 88% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0266990291262 0.026700313972 100% => OK
Particles: 0.00242718446602 0.001811407834 134% => OK
Determiners: 0.167475728155 0.113004496875 148% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0412621359223 0.0255425247493 162% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00242718446602 0.0127820249294 19% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2185.0 2731.13054187 80% => OK
No of words: 390.0 446.07635468 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.60256410256 6.12365571057 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44391917772 4.57801047555 97% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.310256410256 0.378187486979 82% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.202564102564 0.287650121315 70% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.125641025641 0.208842608468 60% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0871794871795 0.135150697306 65% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46047519771 2.79052419416 88% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 207.018472906 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.407692307692 0.469332199767 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 42.5848851707 52.1807786196 82% => OK
How many sentences: 14.0 20.039408867 70% => OK
Sentence length: 27.8571428571 23.2022227129 120% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.9524143224 57.7814097925 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 156.071428571 141.986410481 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.8571428571 23.2022227129 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.5 0.724660767414 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.14285714286 78% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 3.58251231527 223% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 48.1135531136 51.9672348444 93% => OK
Elegance: 2.41558441558 1.8405768891 131% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.486765367975 0.441005458295 110% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.259114194896 0.135418324435 191% => Sentence is so close to another sentence.
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.105725088337 0.0829849096947 127% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.74879107049 0.58762219726 127% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.123576800384 0.147661913831 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.272813197385 0.193483328276 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.112172746314 0.0970749176394 116% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.625682965725 0.42659136922 147% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0908339351335 0.0774707102158 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.392751125933 0.312017818177 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0980309880375 0.0698173142475 140% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.33743842365 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.87684729064 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.82512315271 21% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 7.0 6.46551724138 108% => OK
Negative topic words: 6.0 5.36822660099 112% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.82389162562 35% => OK
Total topic words: 14.0 14.657635468 96% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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