In a laboratory study of two different industrial cleaners, CleanAll was found to remove 40% more dirt and kill 30% more bacteria than the next best cleanser. Furthermore, a study showed that employees working at building cleaned with CleanAll used far fewer sick days than employees working in buildings cleaned with other cleaners.Therefore, to prevent employee illness, all companies should use CleanAll as their industrial cleanser.
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what implications are for the argument if if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
Based on the results of two studies on industrial cleaners, the author as suggested that since one of them cleans better and the utilization of it in a building brings about less disease, all the companies should use CleanAll as their industrial cleaners. However, before this recommendation can be properly evaluated the author 's assumptions must be explained in detail.
First of all,the author is assuming that the extent of the contamination in all of the work environments are similar. Industrial environments would contaminate through various materials and chemical elements. The cleaner which cleans one building better is not only necessarily effective for the other building but also may be dangerous. For instance, consider two factories which one of them produces the foodstuffs and the other one produces cosmetics. The CleanAll utilization may be have negative effects on the materials needed to manufacture foodstuffs but harmless for the other industry. As a result, if the author is not able to justify that the result of the first research can be generalized safely for all of the industrial environment, his conclusion may be undermined.
Moreover, in the second research, the author does not present any evidence of the occupation and the reason of seeking sick days.Maybe, the employees involved the research are from the managers. If so, there is potential that top manager are not able to use their sick days because of their intensive work meetings. Under this theory, the author's conclusion can be refused; however, if the author gives some information that the employees under the research progress were all from the service section and the cleaning is consists of their duties and directly expose the cleaners, his proposal may takes into account. In addition and the most unwarranted assumption is that all sick days have been related to applying the cleaners. The employees probably come across many various accidents required to get rest. Consider a carpenter whose hand damaged by a hammer and can not work for a few days. This accident does not related to the type of cleaners at all. Thus the conclusion based on the fewer sick days underscores completely.
Furthermore, companies provide different type of work leave plus flexible work hours to their employees. The COVID-19 pandemic era can be a good example since many employee do their jobs remotely and the company does not decrease from their sick days. The author is better to present some information about the work leave policies that two buildings have applied for their workers to his assumption can be more reliable. There is potential that on of the companies present flexible work hours in which its employees do not have to make excuse for the common cold to take care of their children when their babysitter is on vacation and subsequently the sick days does not dwindled.
To sum up, the author is presenting some equivocal evidences that are not reliable enough for the all companies to convince them to use a particular cleaner.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 12 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 498 350
No. of Characters: 2492 1500
No. of Different Words: 231 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.724 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.004 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.701 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 181 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 150 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 119 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 62 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.714 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.981 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.619 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.307 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.307 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.071 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 13, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
...st be explained in detail. First of all,the author is assuming that the extent of t...
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Line 2, column 77, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...that the extent of the contamination in all of the work environments are similar. Industri...
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Line 2, column 714, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
... research can be generalized safely for all of the industrial environment, his conclusion ...
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Line 3, column 130, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Maybe
...ion and the reason of seeking sick days.Maybe, the employees involved the research ar...
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Line 3, column 340, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...e work meetings. Under this theory, the authors conclusion can be refused; however, if ...
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Line 3, column 621, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[2]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: addition,
...his proposal may takes into account. In addition and the most unwarranted assumption is ...
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Line 3, column 920, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'relate'
Suggestion: relate
... for a few days. This accident does not related to the type of cleaners at all. Thus th...
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Line 3, column 960, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...related to the type of cleaners at all. Thus the conclusion based on the fewer sick ...
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Line 4, column 159, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun employee seems to be countable; consider using: 'many employees'.
Suggestion: many employees
...andemic era can be a good example since many employee do their jobs remotely and the company ...
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Line 4, column 671, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'dwindle'
Suggestion: dwindle
...and subsequently the sick days does not dwindled. To sum up, the author is presenting...
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Line 4, column 681, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...uently the sick days does not dwindled. To sum up, the author is presenting some...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, second, so, thus, for instance, in addition, as a result, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 28.8173652695 104% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 55.5748502994 106% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2537.0 2260.96107784 112% => OK
No of words: 497.0 441.139720559 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1046277666 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72159896747 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78545540738 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 204.123752495 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.458752515091 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 783.9 705.55239521 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.9776262326 57.8364921388 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.80952381 119.503703932 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6666666667 23.324526521 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.66666666667 5.70786347227 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.25449101796 209% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.126401249904 0.218282227539 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0410044322361 0.0743258471296 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0376543566036 0.0701772020484 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0763571900989 0.128457276422 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0302265611187 0.0628817314937 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 14.3799401198 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.3550499002 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.32208582834 105% => OK
difficult_words: 124.0 98.500998004 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4 Out of 6
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