Teachers salaries should be based on their students academic performance Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim In developing and supporting your position be sure to address the most compelling reaso

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Teachers' salaries should be based on their students' academic performance.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.

Teachers are the most important prats of the pedagogic systems whose performance may have the direct effect on their student's performance. In my opinion, based on the above fact, some people may think that the best way to improve the level of education is that to indicate teacher's salaries based on their student's results. In this case, I mostly disagree with this claim because of two reasons but first of all I want to say that the factors indicating the student's performance as "excellent" or "bad" can be varied in different schools or even in various countries. However, in this essay I want to consider this phrase as the " curriculum scores" and the extent the students participate in team works at the class.

To begin with, I want to disagree with this claim from the psychological point of view. It is true that if the rage of the teacher's salaries varies based on the their success in improving the level of student's results, such as their educating methodologies, the extent the put energy to teach the subjects and also the way they engage themselves with students' problems, it might have a destructive long-term effects. We can divide the students to three groups. The first one consists of self-discipline, astute and sedulous students who regularly study their lessons and care of the path of their education. The second group consists of students who are somehow whimsical, obtuse and completely erratic in the simple tasks such as doing their homework. The last group can be interposed between the other groups.Consider two teachers who have similarities in their methodologies and even educational knowledge. One of them is responsible to teach the first group and the other for the second one. As a result, with the same effort the students' result in first group is significantly higher than the other group just because of the difference in their individual characteristics. In this case, the teacher of second group earned much less wage or perquisite than the other one. In a flawed circle, this teacher may lose her motivation to improve the student's performance since she see all of her efforts useless.

Secondly, the student's performance is not completely pertained to their teacher's performance and may be effected by many factors. One of these factors in the number of students in a class.For example consider two classes which one of them has 20 students and the other has 40 ones. Obviously, the efficacy of the education apart from their teach is higher in the first class. Moreover, the pedagogic equipment play an important role in increasing the potential of students' learning. Advanced laboratories fulled with instrument which help the students to experiment their theoretical subject is an effective factor in their development. As a result, it is not fair to differ between teacher's salaries only based on the student's performance when there are many factors which direct this comparison to an inappropriate way.

To sum up, as the students have various individual characteristics which influence their performance during school time and also the level of their results may be effected by other factors except of the teachers, it is not true to indicate the teacher's wage based on their students' performance.

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Average: 6.2 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, apart from, for example, such as, as a result, first of all, in my opinion, it is true, to begin with, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 33.0505617978 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 80.0 58.6224719101 136% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 12.9106741573 147% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2751.0 2235.4752809 123% => OK
No of words: 537.0 442.535393258 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12290502793 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81386128306 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00420866561 2.79657885939 107% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 215.323595506 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.441340782123 0.4932671777 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 841.5 704.065955056 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.9428865126 60.3974514979 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.0 118.986275619 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5714285714 23.4991977007 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.57142857143 5.21951772744 164% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 7.80617977528 141% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.256479451716 0.243740707755 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0860480502345 0.0831039109588 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0524696303728 0.0758088955206 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184461194517 0.150359130593 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0189955033796 0.0667264976115 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 14.1392134831 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.8420337079 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.1639044944 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 100.480337079 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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