The following appeared in a memo from the owner of a chain of cheese stores located throughout the United States.
"For many years all the stores in our chain have stocked a wide variety of both domestic and imported cheeses. Last year, however, all of the five best-selling cheeses at our newest store were domestic cheddar cheeses from Wisconsin. Furthermore, a recent survey by Cheeses of the World magazine indicates an increasing preference for domestic cheeses among its subscribers. Since our company can reduce expenses by limiting inventory, the best way to improve profits in all of our stores is to discontinue stocking many of our varieties of imported cheese and concentrate primarily on domestic cheeses."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The president of one of cheese producing factories has claimed that because of an increasing interest among people regarding consuming domestic production, and also the growth in the rate of selling this kind of cheese, it would be more profitable if this factory stop its international trades and focus on cheese produces inside the country. However, before this recommendation can be properly evaluated some questions must be answered.
There are dubious matters regarding the result of the research retrieved from both magazine and the rate of sales in the company. The data related to increasing amount of domestic cheese sales has been compared with only last years. So it is possible that there was some fluctuation in the rate of domestic and international distribution which would lead to this result. For instance, is the amount of productions imported to the country as the same as the internal production? It is possible that because of some problems such as corona virus pandemic, less cheese had been trade last and as a result the sales of domestic one would increase. Furthermore, the president has relied to the result of a magazine which illustrates increasing number of people interested in domestic cheese, however, he does not mention the scope of the people. For instance, it ls likely that the research has been connected in some rustic distinctions where rustic people enjoy using the cheese produced from fresh milk. Also, the nature of the subscribers is not obvious. This magazine might have had traditional subscribers who are not believe in using any cheese but their old favorite one. If either of these scenarios has merit,the the CEO 's conclusion drawn in the original argument is significantly weakened.
The other assumption of the president is reducing the cost by decreasing the required stocked places for imported productions. As the company has to compensate the reducing amount of importing cheese with the domestic one through more production, its demand to places for maintaining the cheese would not be obviate. Thus, the president has to answer this important question how he intends to drop the cost of stocking? Moreover, there is not an adequate evaluation on the cost required to increase the rate of production domestic cheese. It is possible that during a statistics calculation it would be determined that the cost of new products is more than money for maintaining cheeses due to its requirement to new equipment or establishing further planets in the factor. If the above mentioned questions are true, then the argument does not hold the water.
In conclusion, the argument as it stand now is considerably flawed because of its reliance to several unwarranted assumptions. If the chief is able to answer the questions above and offer more evidence perhaps in the form of a systematic research study, then it will be possible to fully assay the viability of the proposed recommendation to stopping importing the cheese.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 8 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 485 350
No. of Characters: 2447 1500
No. of Different Words: 227 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.693 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.045 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.813 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 184 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 141 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 114 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 63 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.25 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.76 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.8 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.308 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.308 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.061 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 294, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t there was some fluctuation in the rate of domestic and international distribut...
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Line 2, column 298, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ere was some fluctuation in the rate of domestic and international distribution ...
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Line 2, column 1121, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'believed'.
Suggestion: believed
...had traditional subscribers who are not believe in using any cheese but their old favor...
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Line 2, column 1215, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
.... If either of these scenarios has merit,the the CEO s conclusion drawn in the origi...
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Line 2, column 1216, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
... If either of these scenarios has merit,the the CEO s conclusion drawn in the original ...
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Line 2, column 1216, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
... If either of these scenarios has merit,the the CEO s conclusion drawn in the original ...
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Line 2, column 1299, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nal argument is significantly weakened. The other assumption of the president is...
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Line 3, column 87, Rule ID: NEEDS_FIXED[1]
Message: "required stocked" is only accepted in certain dialects. For something more widely acceptable, try 'stocking' or 'to be stocked'.
Suggestion: stocking; to be stocked
...ing the cost by decreasing the required stocked places for imported productions. As the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, moreover, regarding, so, then, thus, as to, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 55.5748502994 119% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 16.3942115768 134% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2489.0 2260.96107784 110% => OK
No of words: 485.0 441.139720559 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13195876289 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69283662038 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89010538014 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 204.123752495 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.476288659794 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 788.4 705.55239521 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.1793679012 57.8364921388 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.45 119.503703932 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.25 23.324526521 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.95 5.70786347227 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.133303415527 0.218282227539 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0420385118001 0.0743258471296 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0354737008924 0.0701772020484 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0737926386199 0.128457276422 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0445676817589 0.0628817314937 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 14.3799401198 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.77 12.5979740519 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.47 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 98.500998004 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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