The following appeared in a memo from the new vice president of Sartorian, a company that manufactures men's clothing.
"Five years ago, at a time when we had difficulties in obtaining reliable supplies of high quality wool fabric, we discontinued production of our alpaca overcoat. Now that we have a new fabric supplier, we should resume production. This coat should sell very well: since we have not offered an alpaca overcoat for five years and since our major competitor no longer makes an alpaca overcoat, there will be pent-up customer demand. Also, since the price of most types of clothing has increased in each of the past five years, customers should be willing to pay significantly higher prices for alpaca overcoats than they did five years ago, and our company profits will increase."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The vice president of a company producing various cloth has claimed that since they did not have accessibility to purchasing a kind of wool required to product a significant overcoat, they have ceased its production line.The company is able to supply the high quality row materials after five years and he has suggested to restart the production of the overcoat due to the growth of demand and high price contributed to this cloth. However, before this recommendation can be properly evaluated some evidences must be provided.
First of all, there is not an appropriate time correlation between the vice president s' assumptions and his conclusion. For instance, there is not enough information about weather stopping production was merely due to lack of high-quality row materials or there were some other factors such as low revenue obtained from selling this overcoat. Because if there were other obstacles, he would have to explain that they have been obviated after five years. Furthermore, as an active company in the filed of clothes, the recommendation has not considered this important point that fashion and consumer s' taste regarding to their styles are changing very fast. So there is not any guarantee that alpaca overcoat is still trending compared to five years ago. The argument would have been stronger if the vice president had provided enough information regarding that this kind of overcoat is still popular among people and also disability of purchasing wool is the only reason of stopping the production of overcoats.
Secondly, the argument assumes that since the major competitor has not present any alpaca overcoats, demand has increased. However, there is not specific information regarding importing this product from other countries which it might have resulted in satisfying the market needs. If the costumers had been able to buy their favorite attire, the demand would have not changed. The other factor which able to influence the rate of demand is the price of production. The prompt has mentioned that since the price of other clothes has been risen, the consumer would be ready to pay higher price for this high-quality overcoats. However, it might be an important factor for decreasing the rate of demand since people can not afford of the expensive cloths. So the argument regarding the growing demand would have been significantly under question if this product had been at market during these years or people are willing to pay for a luxury products compared to the past.
At last, the prompt has supposed that increasing the price leads to high profit for the company, however, it might have the price for purchasing row materials or the cost of production has also increased which both of them leads to constant or even low revenue. The premise regarding the profit would be completely undermined if there is not any evidence that how the rate of income and cost,reciprocally, change.
To sum up, the argument as it stands now is considerably flawed due to its reliance on several unwarranted assumptions. If the vice president is able to provide specific information about some doubts mentioned above, perhaps in the form of a systematic research and real numbers, then it will be possible to fully evaluate the viability of the proposed recommendation to launch the production of alpaca overcoats again.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 549 350
No. of Characters: 2754 1500
No. of Different Words: 236 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.841 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.016 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.719 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 194 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 152 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 115 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 75 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28.895 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 14.775 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.895 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.328 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.328 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.07 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 222, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...t, they have ceased its production line.The company is able to supply the high qual...
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Line 1, column 311, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'suggested restarting'.
Suggestion: suggested restarting
...w materials after five years and he has suggested to restart the production of the overcoat due to t...
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Line 3, column 940, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'product'?
Suggestion: product
... people are willing to pay for a luxury products compared to the past. At last, the pr...
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Line 4, column 392, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , reciprocally
...nce that how the rate of income and cost,reciprocally, change. To sum up, the argument as i...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, regarding, second, secondly, so, still, then, for instance, kind of, such as, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.6327345309 148% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 28.8173652695 118% => OK
Preposition: 73.0 55.5748502994 131% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 16.3942115768 146% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2803.0 2260.96107784 124% => OK
No of words: 547.0 441.139720559 124% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12431444241 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.83611736076 4.56307096286 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8198236124 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 204.123752495 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.444241316271 0.468620217663 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 886.5 705.55239521 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 22.8473053892 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 86.8482613448 57.8364921388 150% => OK
Chars per sentence: 147.526315789 119.503703932 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.7894736842 23.324526521 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.63157894737 5.70786347227 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.161092441491 0.218282227539 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0481871544801 0.0743258471296 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.051564292725 0.0701772020484 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0958434668593 0.128457276422 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0593323493288 0.0628817314937 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 14.3799401198 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 48.3550499002 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.197005988 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.01 12.5979740519 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 98.500998004 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 12.3882235529 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.1389221557 119% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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