The following appeared in a memo from the owner of a chain of cheese stores located throughout the United States.
"For many years all the stores in our chain have stocked a wide variety of both domestic and imported cheeses. Last year, however, all of the five best-selling cheeses at our newest store were domestic cheddar cheeses from Wisconsin. Furthermore, a recent survey by Cheeses of the World magazine indicates an increasing preference for domestic cheeses among its subscribers. Since our company can reduce expenses by limiting inventory, the best way to improve profits in all of our stores is to discontinue stocking many of our varieties of imported cheese and concentrate primarily on domestic cheeses."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The memo from the owner of a chain of cheese stores consisted a recommendation that discontinuing the stocking of many varieties of cheese would lead to less inventory cost as people are preferring domestic cheese over imported cheese. The memo also included the fact that the newest store of the store chain ranked the five best selling cheese and all those five were domestic cheeses. Also, a recent survey from the Cheeses of World magazine indicated increasing preference of domestic cheese among its subscriber. However, before acting on the recommendation there is a need of two specific evidences to decide if this would be the right choice or not.
First of all, in this era of Social Media, there is wave of trends that influences people's choice and liking towards certain products and services. But, all these trends don't last long. For example, during the covid lockdown, there was a rise in the popularity of Dalgona Coffee. Everyone would share their stories of how they enjoyed the dalgona coffee on social media which resulted in many people trying the Dalgona Coffee. But, it only lasted for a certain weeks and then no one was talking about it anymore. Similarly, the recent increasing preference towards domestic cheese might be for a short amount of time. There is a need for a detailed survey of the customers in order to know their opinion and preference about the cheese.
Secondly, the increasing preference for the domestic cheese might not be the case in all the stores of the chain. For instance, the region in which the new store is situated is the only region where domestic cheese has experienced a increase in demand. There is a need for a detailed research for recent months in chain of cheese stores to know the overall trend across all the stores and not only the latest one.
Also, People tend to avoid changes to things which are personal to them such as food. The bunch of people who use imported cheese on daily basis might not be going with the trend. Therfore, discontuing stocking of imported cheese might become the reason for not being able to fulfill the need for such customers.
In conclusion, there is a need for a detailed study or a survey about the customer preference over the last couple of months to know if the recent trend is going to stay or not. This would definitely help in making a data based decision which can be relied upon.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 417 350
No. of Characters: 1935 1500
No. of Different Words: 196 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.519 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.64 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.399 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 139 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 79 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 59 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 27 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.947 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.126 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.632 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.313 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.533 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.082 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 184, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...d lead to less inventory cost as people are preferring domestic cheese over imported cheese. T...
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Line 3, column 171, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...cts and services. But, all these trends dont last long. For example, during the covi...
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Line 5, column 232, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...n where domestic cheese has experienced a increase in demand. There is a need for...
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Line 5, column 274, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'detailed research'.
Suggestion: detailed research
...increase in demand. There is a need for a detailed research for recent months in chain of cheese st...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, secondly, similarly, so, then, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, talking about, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 28.8173652695 52% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 55.5748502994 101% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1983.0 2260.96107784 88% => OK
No of words: 416.0 441.139720559 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76682692308 5.12650576532 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51620172871 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44571116391 2.78398813304 88% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 204.123752495 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.466346153846 0.468620217663 100% => OK
syllable_count: 621.0 705.55239521 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.8535237647 57.8364921388 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.368421053 119.503703932 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8947368421 23.324526521 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.78947368421 5.70786347227 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.67664670659 214% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.324460185085 0.218282227539 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107008630443 0.0743258471296 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108377898075 0.0701772020484 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.183606132889 0.128457276422 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.130495301097 0.0628817314937 208% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 14.3799401198 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.3550499002 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 12.5979740519 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 98.500998004 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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