In a laboratory study of two different industrial cleansers, CleanAll was found to remove 40%
more dirt and kill 30% more bacteria than the next best cleanser. Furthermore, a study showed
that employees working at buildings cleaned with CleanAll used far fewer sick days than
employees working in buildings cleaned with other cleansers. Therefore, to prevent employee
illness, all companies should use CleanAll as their industrial cleanser.
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument.
Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are
for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
There is a saying that cleanliness is next to godliness.The cleanliness here encompasses all kind of cleanliness ranging from the personal hygiene to environmental cleanliness and spiritual cleanliness to the believers. The argument raised based on the study of two different industrial cleanser made several assumptions which were not explicitly stated. The general assumption that because Users of CleanAll doesn't fall sick frequently compared to users of other cleanser, hence other companies should adopt CleanAll as their cleanser is filled with numerous flaws which some are highlighted below.
The CleanAll cleanser was studied in comparison with supposedly next best cleanser. The study failed to state how the next best cleanser was adopted. Was the adoption based on quality or publicity ,or price range of the cleanser?, if it was based on publicity, does publicity translate to quality?, If it was based on quality, how many cleanser were sampled in comparison with the number of industrial cleansers available?. Until the laboratory can provide answers to all this questions, then the analysis made by it might be erroneous from onset.
Similarly, cleanliness of a building although aid healthy living but does not necessarily translate to healthy living. It is widely known that workers spend on the average 8 out of the available 24 hours in their workplace this translate to approximately 33% of their day. It shows that most of their day are spent outside the workplace. Part and the most important factor that aid healthiness is personal hygiene. No matter how clean an environment is, if an individual is not hygienic, such a person is more susceptible to fall sick. This is a part that the argument failed to address as it made the assumption that the work environment cleanliness is the major factor that determines the healthiness of the staff.
Furthermore, the argument failed to address the condition under which the staffs are working. If two companies whose building are clean and hygienic subject their staff to different working condition, then its bound that they both get different result. For instance, if company A staff are working for 8 hours with a break of an hour in between and company B staff are working for 10 hours without break with all other working condition similar, it can be easily inferred that the company B staff will get easily stressed out compared to company A which may make them resort to having more sick leave. Should the argument be able to specify whether or not the working condition is the same, then the argument might be more valid.
Conclusively, are the policy of the companies the same?, each company has its own policy which means the companies are bound to make different decision. For instance, it might be in the policy of company A that they will be adopting cleanser made by another cleanser producing firm as a sort of partnership for a particular period of time. During the period, the company won't be able to use any other cleanser including CleanAll, hence they have to stick with such cleanser irrespective of how effective the cleanser is once there is no clause in their contractual agreement which allows them to back out of the contract should they find a better cleanser. Until the argument is able to address all these issues, it will continue to be considered weak and got discarded.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 563 350
No. of Characters: 2761 1500
No. of Different Words: 240 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.871 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.904 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.692 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 192 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 158 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 116 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 72 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.81 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.999 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.571 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.289 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.517 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.114 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 57, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...g that cleanliness is next to godliness.The cleanliness here encompasses all kind o...
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Line 1, column 356, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...tions which were not explicitly stated. The general assumption that because Users o...
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Line 1, column 410, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...sumption that because Users of CleanAll doesnt fall sick frequently compared to users ...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ws which some are highlighted below. The CleanAll cleanser was studied in compar...
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Line 3, column 85, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...son with supposedly next best cleanser. The study failed to state how the next best...
^^^
Line 3, column 197, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...e adoption based on quality or publicity ,or price range of the cleanser?, if it w...
^^
Line 3, column 332, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun cleanser seems to be countable; consider using: 'many cleansers'.
Suggestion: many cleansers
...ality?, If it was based on quality, how many cleanser were sampled in comparison with the num...
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Line 7, column 642, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
... Should the argument be able to specify whether or not the working condition is the same, then...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 250, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t they will be adopting cleanser made by another cleanser producing firm as a sor...
^^
Line 9, column 326, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
... a sort of partnership for a particular period of time. During the period, the company wont be...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, hence, if, may, similarly, so, then, for instance, kind of, sort of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 37.0 19.6327345309 188% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 13.6137724551 132% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 28.8173652695 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 70.0 55.5748502994 126% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2822.0 2260.96107784 125% => OK
No of words: 560.0 441.139720559 127% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03928571429 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.8645985582 4.56307096286 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78065245243 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 249.0 204.123752495 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.444642857143 0.468620217663 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 861.3 705.55239521 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 78.2683621135 57.8364921388 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.380952381 119.503703932 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.6666666667 23.324526521 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.04761904762 5.70786347227 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.242023914252 0.218282227539 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0786225356573 0.0743258471296 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0936300831605 0.0701772020484 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135184684919 0.128457276422 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0785670169553 0.0628817314937 125% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 14.3799401198 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 48.3550499002 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 12.5979740519 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.08 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 98.500998004 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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