A recent study by the Centers for Disease Control and Prevention found that employees with
paid sick leave are 28% less likely to be involved in a work-related accident than employees
who do not receive payment for sick leave. Researchers hypothesize that employees with unpaid
sick leave feel pressured to work during time of illness for fear of lack of pay. On-the-job
accidents are then spurred by impaired judgment or motor skills due to illness or illness-related
medications. The highest-risk occupations, such as construction, showed the highest discrepancy
in incidents based upon paid and unpaid leave.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to
determine whether the researchers’ hypothesis is reasonable. Be sure to explain what effects the
answers to these questions would have on the validity of the hypothesis
The study opining that employees with paid sick leave are 28% less likely to be involved in a work-related accident than employees who do not receive payment for sick leave is riddled with a lot of discrepancies. Based on the conclusion of the study, the study is flawed with numerous flaws, some of which are highlighted below.
The study failed to furnished us with the details of the size of the sample studied in comparison with the number of companies that actually existed and it also lack the information of the location where the study was carried out. Based on the absence of these information, it is not convincing to conclude on the statistics given by the study as it can not be verified.
Similarly, the study failed to acknowledge whether or not the policy of the companies where the studies were carried out already address the situation of sick leave as some companies might have clearly stated that there is no payment once an employee is on a sick leave. in a situation where this has been stated in the company policy, then the staff will not have the need to go to work even when they are sick as there is no provision for sick leave whereas health is wealth. this point therefore weakens the claim of the study.
Also, the study failed to intimate us on the scale/yardstick used in qualifying an occupation based on risk assessment. what the study find to be highly dangerous might fall into the category of less dangerous in anther study. So, until the study furnish us with their classification hierarchy, then convincing one about their conclusion is illogical.
Conclusively,because of the flaws highlighted and some inherent ones that were unable to be highlighted due to time constraint, the hypothesis of this study is weak and it needs reevaluation.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 9 15
No. of Words: 309 350
No. of Characters: 1445 1500
No. of Different Words: 154 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.193 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.676 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.644 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 86 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 70 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 49 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 38 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 34.333 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 22.706 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.444 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.468 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.747 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.198 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 162, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'lacks'?
Suggestion: lacks
...anies that actually existed and it also lack the information of the location where t...
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Line 3, column 256, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this information' or 'these informations'?
Suggestion: this information; these informations
...as carried out. Based on the absence of these information, it is not convincing to conclude on th...
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Line 3, column 296, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'concluding'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'convince' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: concluding
...these information, it is not convincing to conclude on the statistics given by the study as...
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Line 5, column 44, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...ilarly, the study failed to acknowledge whether or not the policy of the companies where the s...
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Line 5, column 272, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: In
...nt once an employee is on a sick leave. in a situation where this has been stated ...
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Line 5, column 479, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
...or sick leave whereas health is wealth. this point therefore weakens the claim of th...
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Line 7, column 121, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: What
...an occupation based on risk assessment. what the study find to be highly dangerous m...
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Line 9, column 13, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , because
...conclusion is illogical. Conclusively,because of the flaws highlighted and some inher...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, if, similarly, so, then, therefore, whereas
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 55.5748502994 88% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1486.0 2260.96107784 66% => OK
No of words: 307.0 441.139720559 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84039087948 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87207029607 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 204.123752495 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.511400651466 0.468620217663 109% => OK
syllable_count: 464.4 705.55239521 66% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 19.7664670659 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 22.8473053892 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.3790068522 57.8364921388 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.090909091 119.503703932 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.9090909091 23.324526521 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.36363636364 5.70786347227 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.20758483034 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.35422718287 0.218282227539 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.125657574488 0.0743258471296 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.191781130128 0.0701772020484 273% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.195560573709 0.128457276422 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.200286309091 0.0628817314937 319% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 14.3799401198 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 48.3550499002 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 12.197005988 103% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 12.5979740519 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 98.500998004 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.1389221557 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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