Last year the number of students who enrolled in online degree programs offered by nearby Omni University increased by 50 percent. During the same year, Omni showed a significant decrease from prior years in expenditures for dormitory and classroom space, most likely because online instruction takes place via the Internet. In contrast, over the past three years, enrollment at Humana University has failed to grow and the cost of maintaining buildings has increased. Thus, to increase enrollment and solve the problem of budget deficits at Humana University, we should initiate and actively promote online degree programs like those at Omni
The argument is flawed for numerous reasons. Primarily, the argument assumes initiating an online degree programs is going to increase enrollment and solve the budget deficits but has not provided any clear evidence behind this logic, and hence is not cogent enough.
Online enrollment increases if the offline enrollment has enough reputation otherwise students usually do not get themselves enrolled in an unpopular program. For Omni University it may be the actual fact that their programs have earned nationwide reputation and hence attracted students from distant part of the country who are not able to attend in tradition classroom because of long distance. However, on the other hand, Humana University may be struggling on the fact that their programs are not so popular and their graduates are not in a good condition from the perspective of job employment, and this fact has resultants the failure of growth of student enrollment and in the near future it is even going to drop more rapidly let alone attracting students in online program. had the argument discussed in more details about quality of the running programs in Humana University and ensured that those particular two universities are quite similar in terms of offline program standards and their graduates are equally thriving only than we can conclude the increase in Omni university is due to online degree programs, otherwise not.
Secondly, the argument assumes online degree programs are going to decrease the budget deficits at Humana university. However, it may be true that Humana being a generous university compared to Omni used to charge students less money for the education they provide and many insolvent students study for free in Humana University, and hence the university is suffering now in terms of its budget. An increase in the educational charge only is going to solve the problem for them actually if it is the fact, not initiating an online program.
Meanwhile, it may also be true that Omni University is actually a newly constructed university and most of its buildings are recently constructed, and as a result, the maintaining cost of the buildings and dormitory are negligible compared to the Humana University which is a very old university and most of its buildings are hundreds years old. At the same time, if the two universities are of similar age, even then there is a possibility that Omni university has only online study programs only and virtually they do not have any classroom and few students needs to live in the student dormitory and this is acting behind their low cost of maintaining those buildings.
The argument is not cogent enough because of some unwarranted assumptions and before considering it as a cogent one some questions must be clearly answered.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 455 350
No. of Characters: 2294 1500
No. of Different Words: 198 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.619 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.042 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.733 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 176 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 138 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 107 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 67 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 37.917 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 20.398 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.4 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.667 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.14 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 106, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'program'?
Suggestion: program
...ent assumes initiating an online degree programs is going to increase enrollment and sol...
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Line 3, column 194, Rule ID: ACTUAL_EXPERIENCE[1]
Message: Use simply 'fact'.
Suggestion: fact
...gram. For Omni University it may be the actual fact that their programs have earned nationw...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 784, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Had
... attracting students in online program. had the argument discussed in more details ...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, hence, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, while, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.6327345309 148% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 11.1786427146 170% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 28.8173652695 104% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 55.5748502994 88% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2333.0 2260.96107784 103% => OK
No of words: 455.0 441.139720559 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12747252747 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61852021839 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78273699189 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 204.123752495 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.446153846154 0.468620217663 95% => OK
syllable_count: 769.5 705.55239521 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 19.7664670659 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 37.0 22.8473053892 162% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 104.116387866 57.8364921388 180% => OK
Chars per sentence: 194.416666667 119.503703932 163% => OK
Words per sentence: 37.9166666667 23.324526521 163% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.25 5.70786347227 162% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.276891840774 0.218282227539 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104376000924 0.0743258471296 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0457524082597 0.0701772020484 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133787780987 0.128457276422 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0794168416032 0.0628817314937 126% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.7 14.3799401198 151% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 25.46 48.3550499002 53% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 18.9 12.197005988 155% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.07 12.5979740519 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.91 8.32208582834 107% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 98.500998004 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.8 11.1389221557 151% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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