"Last year the number of students who enrolled in online degree programs offered by nearby Omni University increased by 50 percent. During the same year, Omni showed a significant decrease from prior years in expenditures for dormitory and classroom

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"Last year the number of students who enrolled in online degree programs offered by nearby Omni University increased by 50 percent. During the same year, Omni showed a significant decrease from prior years in expenditures for dormitory and classroom space, most likely because online instruction takes place via the Internet. In contrast, over the past three years, enrollment at Humana University has failed to grow and the cost of maintaining buildings has increased. Thus, to increase enrollment and solve the problem of budget deficits at Humana University, we should initiate and actively promote online degree programs like those at Omni."

Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.

The argument states that in order to increase the enrollment and to solve the budget deficits at humana university, Online degree programes needs to be introduced. The argument came to this conclusion because of the increase in the enrollment and decrease in the expenditure for dormitory and classroom at omni university. However the argument doesn't withstand the conclusion because it failed to answer the following three question?

First of all what are the different factors that increased the enrolments at omni university? It was given that Omni university introduced online instructions via internet. The is no valid data that this is the only factor that increased the enrollment. There may be another reasons like providing the scholarships to the students, an increase in the infrastructure, introducing the new training programs and effective staff. Since there is no valid proof to answer this question the argument loses its point.

Secondly, Does the Humana University located at more populous region or far away from the city? There is a possibility that Omni University is located in the city where more students stay nearby. Many students may work for part time and study. If this is a reason then there is a no point in introducing an online degree program. The argument didnot provide any information about the location of Humuna University which may be the main reason for the increase in the enrollmenmt.

Thirdly, Does the cost of introducing the online degree program less than the expenditure for dormitory and class room space? There is a possibility that Omni University instead of dormitory and class room space invested more amount in providing online degree program. It may be combined with any online platform and does more advertisement.If the above point is true then the cost of intoducing online degree program at Humana university may be more than the expenditures for dormitory and classroom space

Therefore, The assumption made by the arguments doesn't hold water. In order to make the assumption true, the argument needs to provide neccessary data conducted by the surveys or any other valid proofs. Hence the assumption made doesn't seems valid.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, third, thirdly, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 28.8173652695 52% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 55.5748502994 67% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1852.0 2260.96107784 82% => OK
No of words: 352.0 441.139720559 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26136363636 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33147354134 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86081661317 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 204.123752495 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.463068181818 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 598.5 705.55239521 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 58.8682353719 57.8364921388 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.888888889 119.503703932 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5555555556 23.324526521 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 5.70786347227 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.25449101796 228% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.230982423882 0.218282227539 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0834416855226 0.0743258471296 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0663353695021 0.0701772020484 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128996880539 0.128457276422 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0686708640883 0.0628817314937 109% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 14.3799401198 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 48.3550499002 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.5979740519 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 98.500998004 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 356 350
No. of Characters: 1802 1500
No. of Different Words: 160 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.344 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.062 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.775 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 126 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 97 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 80 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 54 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.737 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.362 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.579 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.329 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.582 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.1 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5