the letter to the editor for the West Lansbug News argues that the construction of the road should be prohibited to preserve the region's biodiversity, and ensure a healthy environment. While asserting this
The author of the letter to the editor for the West Lansbug News argues that the construction of the road should be prohibited to preserve the region's biodiversity, and ensure a healthy environment. While asserting this, the author of the letter incorporates a lot of underlying assumptions, three of which are mentioned below.
Firstly, the author of the letter states that tufted groundhog who lives in coastal wetlands of West Lansburg showed a decline in the ancient records. But, there is not evidence regarding the authenticity of these records. Maybe these records are specious, or even if we consider them to be true, they might not give insights into the present day scenario, as they belong to older time. The information provided in these records might be outdated by now. Apart from this, as the development along the coastal wetlands has been prohibited, since it was declared a wildlife sanctuary in 2004, maybe the number of the tufted groundhog have risen by now. And, the development can go abreast to the preservation of tufted groundhog. Therefore, the assertion is lacking major evidence reagrding the authenticity and viability of these ancient records, as well as current population of tufted groundhog. Until these evidence is provided, the argument does not hold water.
Secondly, the author of the letter makes a comparison with the Eastern Carpenteria, which saw a decline in sea otter population after the development process started. But, this claim assumes that West Lansburg and Eastern Carpenteria are analogous or have similar biodiversity. Maybe the Eastern Carpenteria, has different environment and landscapes. And, maybe sea otter population is more volatile to changes compared to tufted groundhog. Apart from this, the decline was noted in 1978, and no analysis is presented that it will be true today as well. As the construction industry has progress a lot since 1978, it may not disturb the environment as it used to in 1978. Thus, the assertion should be substatiated with evidence reagarding the comaprison between West Lansburg and Eastern Carpenteria, and till the assertion is not incontrovertible.
Thirdly, the author states that to preserve region's biodiversity and ensure a healthy environment, the West Lansburg council should no pass this project. But, will making this assertion the author assumes the groundhog population to represent the whole biodiversity, which is not true. The tufted groundhog are just a small part of the whole biodiversity, even if their is some impact over the groundhog population, then it may not be a whole catastrophe for the entire environment. Therefore, author appropriates the groundhog as a whole biodiversity. Therefore, the author's statement is not valid in this part.
Conclusively, the author of the letter subsumes a lot assumptions while inferring tha the development process in the West Lansburg should be resisted. Therefore, he or she need to provide evidences for his or her argument to be impeccable.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 478 350
No. of Characters: 2462 1500
No. of Different Words: 199 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.676 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.151 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.937 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 183 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 148 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 111 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 76 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.917 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.826 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.302 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.504 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.127 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 144, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'regions'' or 'region's'?
Suggestion: regions'; region's
...ad should be prohibited to preserve the regions biodiversity, and ensure a healthy envi...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 165, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'make'
Suggestion: make
... should no pass this project. But, will making this assertion the author assumes the g...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 365, Rule ID: THEIR_IS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'there'?
Suggestion: there
...part of the whole biodiversity, even if their is some impact over the groundhog popul...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 569, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...as a whole biodiversity. Therefore, the authors statement is not valid in this part. ...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, third, thirdly, thus, well, while, apart from, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 28.8173652695 108% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 55.5748502994 95% => OK
Nominalization: 29.0 16.3942115768 177% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2534.0 2260.96107784 112% => OK
No of words: 478.0 441.139720559 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30125523013 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67581127817 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04558252337 2.78398813304 109% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 204.123752495 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.445606694561 0.468620217663 95% => OK
syllable_count: 779.4 705.55239521 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 15.0 8.76447105788 171% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 2.70958083832 295% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.8545405482 57.8364921388 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.583333333 119.503703932 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9166666667 23.324526521 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.70833333333 5.70786347227 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.67664670659 278% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.321302672001 0.218282227539 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0874096424567 0.0743258471296 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.136234914802 0.0701772020484 194% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.223493449782 0.128457276422 174% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.188096370002 0.0628817314937 299% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 14.3799401198 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.46 12.5979740519 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 98.500998004 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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