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The following appeared in a memo to the board of directors of a company that specializes in the delivery of heating oil.

"Most homes in the northeastern United States, where winters are typically cold, have traditionally used oil as their major fuel for heating. Last heating season, that region experienced 90 days with below-normal temperatures, and climate forecasters predict that this weather pattern will continue for several more years. Furthermore, many new homes are being built in the region in response to recent population growth. Because of these trends, we can safely predict that this region will experience an increased demand for heating oil during the next five years."

Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the prediction and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the prediction.

As per the memo to the board of directors of directors a company, there would be an increased demand for fuel during winters. There are three major unanswered assumptions which are incorporated by the author of the memo, and needs be answered for a persuasive conclusion.

First of all, the author states that most of the homes in the northeastern United States, during winters, traditionally used oil as their major fuel for heating. And while stating so, the author assumes that if a practice has been conventionally going on for years, would still be undertaken in the present day scenario by majority of the people living in that area. It is possible that the residents might have moved on to the latest technological advancements in the heating industry. Maybe majority of the people started using Electric Heaters instead of the orthodox methods of the heating using fuel. Thus, the author needs to hold this into account in order to make his/her assertion hold true.

Second of all, the writer of the memo assumes that the decline in the temperature would be so intense that it would require more heating. It has been stated that the region experienced temperature below normal temperatures for 90 days. However, there is no data provided for quantifying the decline. It might be minute and would not even require extra heat for survival. If the lowering in the temperature was in the order of 0.5 degrees, then the heating used during the normal temperatures would be sufficient. Therefore, the author needs provide information regarding the drop in temperature for his conclusion to be convincing.

Finally, the author assumes that the population growth will result in the construction of new homes. But, maybe the hike in population can be accommodated in the currently existing homes, or the growth in the population results in migration of residents to a new place during the winters. As the number of homes in the region might not change drastically, the requirement for excess amount of fuel for heating might not be valid. Thus, the author needs to provide more fungible evidence regarding the construction of new home for incorporating the population rise, and thus a rise in demand for the fuel.

In conclusion, the author takes into account 3 major assumptions which would have a great deal of affect for quantifying the rise in the amount of fuel required by the residents of northeastern United States during winters. Thus, it order to make his/her assertion more sound, he/she needs to provide more data for eradicating above mentioned speculations.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: of directors
As per the memo to the board of directors of directors a company, there would be an increased ...
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...g in the temperature was in the order of 0.5 degrees, then the heating used durin...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...ing might not be valid. Thus, the author needs to provide more fungible evidence ...
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Suggestion: effect
...ptions which would have a great deal of affect for quantifying the rise in the amount of f...
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Line 9, column 234, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'orders'?
Suggestion: orders
... United States during winters. Thus, it order to make his/her assertion more sound, h...
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Line 9, column 240, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'making'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'order' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: making
...d States during winters. Thus, it order to make his/her assertion more sound, he/she ne...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, may, regarding, second, so, still, then, therefore, thus, while, in conclusion, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 55.5748502994 115% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2158.0 2260.96107784 95% => OK
No of words: 427.0 441.139720559 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05386416862 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54576487731 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84038352623 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 204.123752495 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.447306791569 0.468620217663 95% => OK
syllable_count: 675.0 705.55239521 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.2649704221 57.8364921388 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.578947368 119.503703932 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4736842105 23.324526521 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.63157894737 5.70786347227 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.228330265145 0.218282227539 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0792725433965 0.0743258471296 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0862187470379 0.0701772020484 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141708351716 0.128457276422 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.070081142792 0.0628817314937 111% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 14.3799401198 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 98.500998004 95% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, may, regarding, second, so, still, then, therefore, thus, while, in conclusion, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments