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The following appeared in a memo to the board of directors of a company that specializes in the delivery of heating oil.
"Most homes in the northeastern United States, where winters are typically cold, have traditionally used oil as their major fuel for heating. Last heating season, that region experienced 90 days with below-normal temperatures, and climate forecasters predict that this weather pattern will continue for several more years. Furthermore, many new homes are being built in the region in response to recent population growth. Because of these trends, we can safely predict that this region will experience an increased demand for heating oil during the next five years."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.

The memo mentioned above concludes that the trend of winters being cold in the northeastern United states will result into increased demand for heating oil in the coming 5 years.This is backed by their argument that many new houses are being built in that area and it is being implied that they will use oil for heating.But this argument need to be thoroughly analysed before we accept it.For this reason, we need some evidence.

Firstly it is said that “traditionally” oil was the heating agent used.But over the years electrical appliances have taken that place (electric stove,heater,water heaters,microwave).Moreover it is also mentioned that oil was a major fuel used,implying there were other substitutes for this fuel.It could be kerosene,petrol.It is a unwarranted assumption that Oil is the sole fuel available in that region.This assumption can weaken the argument.
Secondly now that the new homes are being built they will be built with the latest heating /temperature control systems available in the market.Also even though 90 days out of 365 days will be winter it wouldn’t lead to that drastic increase in the oil consumption of that area.Moreover it is predicted that weather pattern will continue the same pattern, but weather is subject to circumstantial change.So it may happen that this may mean that extreme winters occur only for 2 more years.So making such a far-fetched assumption about the oil usage will be overly simplistic of us
From the above examples we that the argument,as it stands now is flawed and doesn’t hold water.If more evidence about alternative fuels used in the region and the credibility of the forecast is provided then this argument can be evaluated more effectively.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, then

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 28.8173652695 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 25.0 55.5748502994 45% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1451.0 2260.96107784 64% => OK
No of words: 278.0 441.139720559 63% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21942446043 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08329915638 4.56307096286 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.31968398258 2.78398813304 119% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 204.123752495 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.575539568345 0.468620217663 123% => OK
syllable_count: 444.6 705.55239521 63% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 3.0 19.7664670659 15% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 92.0 22.8473053892 403% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 190.840829547 57.8364921388 330% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 483.666666667 119.503703932 405% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 92.6666666667 23.324526521 397% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 24.0 5.70786347227 420% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 22.0 5.25449101796 419% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.206759345271 0.218282227539 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.151902820624 0.0743258471296 204% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0459639205898 0.0701772020484 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12148159745 0.128457276422 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0655140550806 0.0628817314937 104% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 49.5 14.3799401198 344% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -21.9 48.3550499002 -45% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 17.1 7.1628742515 239% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 39.2 12.197005988 321% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 14.18 12.5979740519 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 12.46 8.32208582834 150% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 98.500998004 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 28.0 12.3882235529 226% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 38.8 11.1389221557 348% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 39.0 11.9071856287 328% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, then

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