Many lives might be saved if inoculations against cow flu were routinely administered to all people in areas where the disease is detected. However, since there is a small possibility that a person will die as a result of the inoculations, we cannot permit inoculations against cow flu to be routinely administered.
The author states that the inoculations against cow flu should not be permitted routinely as the possibility of a person getting diagnosed with the flu is very less. However, the author has not given any proof or data to support the argument. There is a lot of ambiguity in the statement which can be understood in many different ways. Therefore, it might be wrong to state that vaccines should not be allowed on a regular basis.
Firstly, I would like to support my argument by saying that author has not provided any information regarding the areas that might be affected by the disease. There is also no data regarding the population density of the people. It is also possible that other farm animals might get affected by this disease. There is also no data that supports the conclusion that by doing so the diseases did not spread in other areas or from past years.
Secondly, author has not mentioned any data regarding what would happen if the inoculations are not permitted regularly and the disease is spread among the people. There has no information regarding how much vaccines are available so that if it spreads inadvertently then what measures should be taken care of? Hence, it is not viable enough to not to permit the inoculations.
Moreover, there is no information either in the form of number or percentages regarding, what are the odds of people getting affected by this disease? There is also no data to support in how much population density it spreads or through which medium so that people can take primary precautions against this disease.
Lastly, I would like to end my argument by saying that without any proper information to support, the author should not conclude an argument. Maybe if data would be presented the speculations that have been made are nullified by the facts. Hence, It is not necessary that inoculation against cow flu cannot be administered routinely.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 324 350
No. of Characters: 1547 1500
No. of Different Words: 143 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.243 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.775 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.653 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 110 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 81 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 55 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 38 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.25 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.9 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.875 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.346 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.52 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.058 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 316, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...he statement which can be understood in many different ways. Therefore, it might be wrong to s...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ad in other areas or from past years. Secondly, author has not mentioned any d...
^^
Line 3, column 206, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
... There has no information regarding how much vaccines are available so that if it sp...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, hence, however, if, lastly, may, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, therefore
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 55.5748502994 77% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1583.0 2260.96107784 70% => OK
No of words: 324.0 441.139720559 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88580246914 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24264068712 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72289226378 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 204.123752495 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.45987654321 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 505.8 705.55239521 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.477679391 57.8364921388 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.9375 119.503703932 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.25 23.324526521 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0625 5.70786347227 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201684516065 0.218282227539 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0749300344663 0.0743258471296 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0886428481231 0.0701772020484 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117620038239 0.128457276422 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0590587307601 0.0628817314937 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 14.3799401198 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 12.5979740519 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.55 8.32208582834 91% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 98.500998004 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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