Many lives might be saved if inoculations against cow flu were routinely administered to all people in areas where the disease is detected However since there is a small possibility that a person will die as a result of the inoculations we cannot permit i

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Many lives might be saved if inoculations against cow flu were routinely administered to all people in areas where the disease is detected. However, since there is a small possibility that a person will die as a result of the inoculations, we cannot permit inoculations against cow flu to be routinely administered.

The author of this note concludes that the innoculation of cow flue should not be permitted as as there is a possiblity the person will die.I find the conclusion highly flawed and incorrect for the following reasons.

The process of narrowing down an area as one infected/effected by the cow flue is a dificlt task. It is possible that there are few casees in a given are due to them coming from an outside resgion. To assume that the whole are is effected is innacurate.It can also happen many times the detection of the flue doesnt takle place for a while and it has allready spread make any innoculation not possible at the time.If they were innculated regurarly it would not have happened in the first place.

The author claims that there is a small possiblity of death as a result of innoculation.However to support this he has not provided any data or evidence that it was the innoculation that has caused the deaths. It is very much possible the people who died had other underlying conditions that were never diagnosed and caused the death. A lot of the deaths could have been related to the age group that was innoculated. If all many of the members were of 85-90 years age category then death due to old age is a verry likely possiblity than the innnoculation.

To assume that lives will be saved due to regular innculation is a steach. This is because the innclation might work for a short period of time but the flu can become stonger by mutation, COVID 19 being a great example inout times.The vaccines developed currently can only protect us from a varient of the virus the new mutated DELTA and DELTA PLUS will still be a cause for worry. It is also proven that our bodies become resistent to medication the more we take it,for example antibiotics, if taken in wrong dosages will render the medication to be innefective when actually in for it.How ever this doesn mean takeing the nessesary dosage and innculation shots is not nessesary, by doing so one is being more carefull.

in conculusion to say that innoculation should not be done to prevent deaths is counter intuitive. its safer to do regural inovulation than not have any at all. The authos has also not provided any substantial data about the realtion beeet ween deaths and inniculation or deaths in general wich would hep us determine if the deaths were always the same of actually related to the innculatrion process.

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Average: 7.5 (2 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...y innoculation not possible at the time.If they were innculated regurarly it would...
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...who died had other underlying conditions that were never diagnosed and caused the...
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...rmine if the deaths were always the same of actually related to the innculatrion ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, however, if, so, still, then, while, for example, in general, as a result, in the first place

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 19.6327345309 158% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 28.8173652695 115% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 55.5748502994 74% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2000.0 2260.96107784 88% => OK
No of words: 422.0 441.139720559 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.73933649289 5.12650576532 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53239876712 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78347974383 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 204.123752495 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.535545023697 0.468620217663 114% => OK
syllable_count: 645.3 705.55239521 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 22.8473053892 131% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 92.2583163665 57.8364921388 160% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.857142857 119.503703932 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.1428571429 23.324526521 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.64285714286 5.70786347227 151% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 21.0 5.25449101796 400% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193373985062 0.218282227539 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0645071037874 0.0743258471296 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0437581728926 0.0701772020484 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100466528879 0.128457276422 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0405430062715 0.0628817314937 64% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 14.3799401198 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.49 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.8 12.5979740519 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 98.500998004 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 11.1389221557 126% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 93, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: as
...ion of cow flue should not be permitted as as there is a possiblity the person will d...
^^^^^
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: I
...ere is a possiblity the person will die.I find the conclusion highly flawed and i...
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Suggestion: It
...the whole are is effected is innacurate.It can also happen many times the detectio...
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Suggestion: doesn't
...en many times the detection of the flue doesnt takle place for a while and it has al...
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...y times the detection of the flue doesnt takle place for a while and it has allr...
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...flue doesnt takle place for a while and it has allready spread make any innocula...
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Suggestion: If
...y innoculation not possible at the time.If they were innculated regurarly it would...
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Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...y innoculation not possible at the time.If they were innculated regurarly it would...
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Suggestion: However
...ty of death as a result of innoculation.However to support this he has not provided any...
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Suggestion: However,
...ty of death as a result of innoculation.However to support this he has not provided any...
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Line 7, column 287, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...who died had other underlying conditions that were never diagnosed and caused the...
^^
Line 7, column 420, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... to the age group that was innoculated. If all many of the members were of 85-90 ...
^^
Line 7, column 454, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ated. If all many of the members were of 85-90 years age category then death due ...
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Line 10, column 130, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...e the innclation might work for a short period of time but the flu can become stonger by mutat...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 10, column 232, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...ID 19 being a great example inout times.The vaccines developed currently can only p...
^^^
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Suggestion: , for
...istent to medication the more we take it,for example antibiotics, if taken in wrong ...
^^^^
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Suggestion: How
... be innefective when actually in for it.How ever this doesn mean takeing the nesses...
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Line 10, column 588, Rule ID: HOW_EVER[1]
Message: Did you mean 'however'?
Suggestion: However
... be innefective when actually in for it.How ever this doesn mean takeing the nessesary d...
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Suggestion: In
...doing so one is being more carefull. in conculusion to say that innoculation sh...
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Line 12, column 100, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Its
...to prevent deaths is counter intuitive. its safer to do regural inovulation than no...
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Line 12, column 353, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rmine if the deaths were always the same of actually related to the innculatrion ...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, however, if, so, still, then, while, for example, in general, as a result, in the first place

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 19.6327345309 158% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 28.8173652695 115% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 55.5748502994 74% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2000.0 2260.96107784 88% => OK
No of words: 422.0 441.139720559 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.73933649289 5.12650576532 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53239876712 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78347974383 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 204.123752495 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.535545023697 0.468620217663 114% => OK
syllable_count: 645.3 705.55239521 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 22.8473053892 131% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 92.2583163665 57.8364921388 160% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.857142857 119.503703932 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.1428571429 23.324526521 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.64285714286 5.70786347227 151% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 21.0 5.25449101796 400% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193373985062 0.218282227539 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0645071037874 0.0743258471296 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0437581728926 0.0701772020484 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100466528879 0.128457276422 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0405430062715 0.0628817314937 64% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 14.3799401198 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.49 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.8 12.5979740519 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 98.500998004 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 11.1389221557 126% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.