Many lives might be saved if inoculations against cow flu were routinely administered to all people in areas where the disease is detected. However, since there is a small possibility that a person will die as a result of the inoculations, we cannot permit inoculations against cow flu to be routinely administered
The given prompt suggests that inoculations were given for people residing in areas where cow flue disease were detected . However , the inoculation drive was not permitted anymore due to a slightest of chances that it may cause death to those who have been administered with it .Before the given prompt can be properly evaluvated , it needs to answer three questions.
First of all , are there any solid basis of evidence , that incoulations might cause a person to die ? Perhaps , what about taking in account of other factors ? Due to rampant spread of the cow flu disease , many people of the affected areas , would be tempted to administer themselves with the inoculation , for enhancing their immunity against the flu irrespective of their ages , the malfunctions thier body might possess -either by birth or acquired in their life . Perhaps , it can also be an acute or severe signs their body may have during the time of inoculation. If such people were , in fact been administered by the inoculation , then the role played by the person's peripheral illness might have contributed for his or her's death . If the above statement is true , then the conclusion is weakened .
Secondly, are there any basis for which the magnitude of the success rate of inoculations to be hampered by the "small possibility " of a person's death due to the inoculation itself ? . Perhaps , it might be due to the inefficiency of the earliest , archaic anti-flu inoculations which are used to meet the demand , currently doesnt stand a chance against the new variant of the cow flu . If such 'out of date ' inoculation drives were administered to the people of the affected area , then it would have tout as a serious major player for the inoculation's 'small possibility ' of it's ineffectiveness. If this statement is true , then the assumption made by the author is flawed .
Finally , how come the author can come to a conclusion that routine administration of inoculation -which is the primary savior in such critical times , might fuel to increase the chances that a person might die ? What if , the current inoculations are made of strains that have been weakended or passive by nature and what if the earlier administered inoculation would have been made of a strong and hyper mutable starin? clearly there has not been any informations regarding this possibility and if such scenario is true , then the assumption of the prompt does not hold water.
The argument , as it stands now is considerably flawed , due to its reliance on unwarranted assumptions . If the author can provide a sounding evidence on systematic and relevant basis to answer the above mentioned three questions , then it will be possible to fully evaluvate the assumption that routine administration of inoculation would lead to death .
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 9 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 12 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 458 350
No. of Characters: 2249 1500
No. of Different Words: 210 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.626 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.91 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.857 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 147 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 113 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 81 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 56 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 30.533 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 16.879 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.733 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.349 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.349 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.063 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 121, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...eas where cow flue disease were detected . However , the inoculation drive was not...
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Line 1, column 131, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...cow flue disease were detected . However , the inoculation drive was not permitted...
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Line 1, column 189, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use 'the' with the superlative.
Suggestion: the
... drive was not permitted anymore due to a slightest of chances that it may cause ...
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Line 1, column 279, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...those who have been administered with it .Before the given prompt can be properly ...
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Line 1, column 281, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Before
...ose who have been administered with it .Before the given prompt can be properly evaluv...
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Line 1, column 331, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... given prompt can be properly evaluvated , it needs to answer three questions. Fir...
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Line 1, column 382, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... to answer three questions. First of all , are there any solid basis of evidence ,...
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Line 1, column 422, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... , are there any solid basis of evidence , that incoulations might cause a person ...
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Line 1, column 480, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ns might cause a person to die ? Perhaps , what about taking in account of other f...
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Line 1, column 575, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...to rampant spread of the cow flu disease , many people of the affected areas , wou...
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Line 1, column 611, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ease , many people of the affected areas , would be tempted to administer themselv...
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Line 1, column 676, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...minister themselves with the inoculation , for enhancing their immunity against th...
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Line 1, column 750, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ainst the flu irrespective of their ages , the malfunctions thier body might posse...
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Line 1, column 837, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...ither by birth or acquired in their life . Perhaps , it can also be an acute or se...
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Line 1, column 847, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...irth or acquired in their life . Perhaps , it can also be an acute or severe signs...
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Line 1, column 961, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...time of inoculation. If such people were , in fact been administered by the inocul...
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Line 1, column 1008, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...act been administered by the inoculation , then the role played by the persons per...
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Line 1, column 1110, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...t have contributed for his or hers death . If the above statement is true , then t...
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Line 1, column 1143, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
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Suggestion: ,
...s death . If the above statement is true , then the conclusion is weakened . Secon...
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Line 1, column 1177, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
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Suggestion: .
...s true , then the conclusion is weakened . Secondly, are there any basis for which...
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Line 1, column 1328, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...the 'small possibility ' of a persons death due to the inoculation itself ? ....
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Line 1, column 1374, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...s death due to the inoculation itself ? . Perhaps , it might be due to the ineffi...
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Line 1, column 1383, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ue to the inoculation itself ? . Perhaps , it might be due to the inefficiency of ...
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Line 1, column 1437, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... due to the inefficiency of the earliest , archaic anti-flu inoculations which are...
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Line 1, column 1503, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ations which are used to meet the demand , currently doesnt stand a chance against...
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Line 1, column 1516, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...are used to meet the demand , currently doesnt stand a chance against the new variant ...
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Line 1, column 1576, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...e against the new variant of the cow flu . If such out of date inoculation drives...
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Line 1, column 1598, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ant of the cow flu . If such out of date inoculation drives were administered to ...
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Line 1, column 1671, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...tered to the people of the affected area , then it would have tout as a serious ma...
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Line 1, column 1693, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'touted'.
Suggestion: touted
... the affected area , then it would have tout as a serious major player for the inocu...
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Line 1, column 1762, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...r for the inoculations small possibility of its ineffectiveness. If this statemen...
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Line 1, column 1813, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...effectiveness. If this statement is true , then the assumption made by the author ...
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Line 1, column 1864, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
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Suggestion: .
... assumption made by the author is flawed . Finally , how come the author can come ...
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Line 1, column 1874, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
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Suggestion: ,
...n made by the author is flawed . Finally , how come the author can come to a concl...
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Line 1, column 2016, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...he primary savior in such critical times , might fuel to increase the chances that...
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Line 1, column 2087, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
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Suggestion: ,
...hances that a person might die ? What if , the current inoculations are made of st...
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Line 1, column 2289, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Clearly
...e of a strong and hyper mutable starin? clearly there has not been any informations reg...
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Line 1, column 2388, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...possibility and if such scenario is true , then the assumption of the prompt does ...
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Line 1, column 2458, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
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Suggestion: ,
...prompt does not hold water/ The argument , as it stands now is considerably flawed...
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Line 1, column 2500, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... as it stands now is considerably flawed , due to its reliance on unwarranted assu...
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Line 1, column 2549, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
... its reliance on unwarranted assumptions . If the author can provide a sounding ev...
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Line 1, column 2676, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...swer the above mentioned three questions , then it will be possible to fully evalu...
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Line 1, column 2800, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...ation of inoculation would lead to death .
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, in fact, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.6327345309 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 55.5748502994 110% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 16.3942115768 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2303.0 2260.96107784 102% => OK
No of words: 459.0 441.139720559 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0174291939 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62863751936 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96164349959 2.78398813304 106% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 204.123752495 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.461873638344 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 738.9 705.55239521 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 22.8473053892 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 74.6742927653 57.8364921388 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.9375 119.503703932 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.6875 23.324526521 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5625 5.70786347227 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 1.0 5.15768463074 19% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 43.0 5.25449101796 818% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.361989724049 0.218282227539 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111808030365 0.0743258471296 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0814713208134 0.0701772020484 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.361989724049 0.128457276422 282% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0628817314937 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 14.3799401198 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 48.3550499002 89% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.197005988 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.43 12.5979740519 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.47 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 98.500998004 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.1389221557 119% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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