Many lives might be saved if inoculations against cow flu were routinely administered to all people in areas where the disease is detected. However, since there is a small possibility that a person will die as a result of the inoculations, we cannot permit inoculations against cow flu to be routinely administered.
The given statement concludes that as there is a minute chance that the cow flu vaccine may be fatal,it shouldn't be permitted to be routinely administered.Vaccination are taken as a premptive measure to avoid deadly diseases.Hence,to say that a vaccination shouldn't be taken without evaluating all the evidence will be overly simplistic.We need evidence to ask some questions to confirm this statement made by the author.
Firstly, the writer claims that there is a small chance that that a person will die due to the vaccinataion.We need to know the credibility of this claim.We need the statistics of how small is the chance that this dose will be fatal.The chance might be as small as 0.0000000001 % in a poulation of millions.And if the dose was fatal we need to know whether the patient had any co-morbidities along with the disease that lead to their death.It may so happen that the patient was very old in age and already had weak immunity,or had other medical conditions that were exacerbated by the on cow-flu vaccination.These all studies are genrally done before a vaccine is released for all the people.Hence a official list of eligible recievers could eliminate the chance of fatalities.Moreover,medicines have some pros and cons,hence until we have how small the chance is of fatality we cannot outright deny the permission to innoculate.
Moreover,the source of this argument is unknown.If this were a statement given by a credulous organizations like WHO,FDA then it would hold some water.This piece of argument could merely be a laymans interpretation of whatever information they might have read on the internet.Unless this claim is verified by a authorised and erudite person,it will presumptuous to deny vaccinating peeople
Other than this,it is said that if the vaccines were routinely administered in the places where cow-flu is detected then many lives could be saved.First we need to know that whether,if someone has contracted the disease once, do they get acquired immunity to the disease?If it is so then we can focus on the people who have never contracted the disease and get them innoculated as fast as we can.
Hence,there is dire need of evidence for this argument to hold water,else it is a very weak argument.Correct data about the statistics of fatality,Source of the information and proper survey of the disease's nature will surely strengthen this argument.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 12 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 17 2
No. of Sentences: 6 15
No. of Words: 422 350
No. of Characters: 1964 1500
No. of Different Words: 201 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.532 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.654 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.693 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 126 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 98 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 71 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 44 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 70.333 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 15.574 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 1 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.488 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.916 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.215 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 101, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , it
...ce that the cow flu vaccine may be fatal,it shouldnt be permitted to be routinely a...
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Line 1, column 105, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
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Suggestion: shouldn't
...hat the cow flu vaccine may be fatal,it shouldnt be permitted to be routinely administer...
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...mptive measure to avoid deadly diseases.Hence,to say that a vaccination shouldnt be t...
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Suggestion: , to
...e measure to avoid deadly diseases.Hence,to say that a vaccination shouldnt be take...
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...person will die due to the vaccinataion.We need to know the credibility of this cl...
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...old in age and already had weak immunity,or had other medical conditions that were ...
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Suggestion: These
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Suggestion: Hence
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Line 3, column 693, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
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...ould eliminate the chance of fatalities.Moreover,medicines have some pros and cons,hence...
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...reover,medicines have some pros and cons,hence until we have how small the chance is o...
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...t deny the permission to innoculate. Moreover,the source of this argument is unknown....
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...he permission to innoculate. Moreover,the source of this argument is unknown.If t...
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...,the source of this argument is unknown.If this were a statement given by a credul...
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...y vaccinating peeople Other than this,it is said that if the vaccines were routi...
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...detected then many lives could be saved.First we need to know that whether,if someone...
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...saved.First we need to know that whether,if someone has contracted the disease once...
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...ct data about the statistics of fatality,Source of the information and proper survey of...
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Line 9, column 199, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'diseases'' or 'disease's'?
Suggestion: diseases'; disease's
...he information and proper survey of the diseases nature will surely strengthen this argu...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, hence, if, may, moreover, so, then
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.6327345309 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 12.9520958084 170% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 28.8173652695 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 55.5748502994 77% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2016.0 2260.96107784 89% => OK
No of words: 390.0 441.139720559 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16923076923 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44391917772 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.51679236984 2.78398813304 126% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 204.123752495 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.510256410256 0.468620217663 109% => OK
syllable_count: 648.9 705.55239521 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 19.7664670659 20% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 97.0 22.8473053892 425% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 272.845652338 57.8364921388 472% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 504.0 119.503703932 422% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 97.5 23.324526521 418% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 12.5 5.70786347227 219% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 38.0 5.25449101796 723% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 8.20758483034 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.23281185008 0.218282227539 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.127305545704 0.0743258471296 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0609701162616 0.0701772020484 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120432195185 0.128457276422 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0686002541091 0.0628817314937 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 51.7 14.3799401198 360% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -35.44 48.3550499002 -73% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 18.2 7.1628742515 254% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 42.3 12.197005988 347% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 13.89 12.5979740519 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 12.42 8.32208582834 149% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 98.500998004 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 29.0 12.3882235529 234% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 40.8 11.1389221557 366% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 29.0 11.9071856287 244% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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