An ailing patient should have easy access to his or her doctor’s record of treating similarly afflicted patients. Through gaining such access, the ailing patient may better determine whether the doctor is competent to treat that medical condition.
Being a doctor is a highly respected profession.A renowned doctor is preceded by their reputation over the years.This reputation in built by their success rate in their feield.Considering this I would almost extend my support to the statement that a patient could have access to the doctor's record of treating similarly afflicted pateients.But I would concede by saying that every patient is different and their treatments are purely circumstantial.Hence there are some drawbacks to this belief too,that will be discussed at the end.
A patient should be able to access the doctor's previous statistics to gain confidence in them.Afterall the patient is trusting them with their life.A doctor's record of treating similarly affected patients reinforces their skill and talent to heal the similar kind of patient.Consider a person with a weak heart and their case is higly complicated.They have a myriad doctors list to consider for the best treatment they can afford.What will be the deciding factor here?I t will be the doctor's success rate doing such surgeries on the weak hearts previously.This would give the ailing patient and their family a ray of hope in thei trying times.
While Keeping the doctor's records accesible(with right privacy measures taken)to an ailing patient may assuage them,at the same time it holds the doctor too accountable to maintain their utmost level of care towards the patient.They too feel a sense of greater responsibility towards their patient and their own career ot the organization they are linked with.Say a doctor claims to treat a certain condition,but without any background of their previous work no one will trust them.Even the hospitals wont hire them.The most talented of the lot goes under rigorous training for years to become the best in their feild.The interns and the residents are continously observed and monitored by their attendings till they master their skills.Hence it is of utmost importance that the doctors track record speaks for themselves.
However,if the parient gets an unrestricted access to the previous patient's this will be the invasion of their privacy.It will also make the patient compare themselves with other patients with similar conditions.The patient may question the doctors descisions,and come with preconcieved notions.As I said before a treatment course is purely subjective and circumstantial,exposing the patients with extra information other than the doctors record will be highly fallacious.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, may, similarly, so, while, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.3162921348 35% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 45.0 33.0505617978 136% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 58.6224719101 78% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2099.0 2235.4752809 94% => OK
No of words: 385.0 442.535393258 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.45194805195 5.05705443957 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.24731008212 2.79657885939 116% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 215.323595506 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.550649350649 0.4932671777 112% => OK
syllable_count: 616.5 704.065955056 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 20.2370786517 20% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 96.0 23.0359550562 417% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 132.255434671 60.3974514979 219% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 524.75 118.986275619 441% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 96.25 23.4991977007 410% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 16.25 5.21951772744 311% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 32.0 7.80617977528 410% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 10.2758426966 29% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.328525939221 0.243740707755 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.229021011722 0.0831039109588 276% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.051218287698 0.0758088955206 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.229021011722 0.150359130593 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.051218287698 0.0667264976115 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 52.4 14.1392134831 371% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -25.96 48.8420337079 -53% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 17.1 7.92365168539 216% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 40.7 12.1743820225 334% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 15.51 12.1639044944 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 12.5 8.38706741573 149% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 100.480337079 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 29.0 11.8971910112 244% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 40.4 11.2143820225 360% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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