Many lives might be saved if inoculations against cow flu were routinely administered to all people in areas where the disease is detected. However, since there is a small possibility that a person will die as a result of the inoculations, we cannot permit inoculations against cow flu to be routinely administered.
According to the memo, the author concludes that it is unsafe to administer inoculation against cow flu. The author comes to this conclusion based on the perception that there could be a possiblility of fatality in administration. However, as it stands now, the author would have to provide evidences to these three unwarranted assumptions, if true could hamper the credibility of such recommendation.
First of all, the author assumes that mundane administration of cow flu's inoculations might be life-saving. Perhaps, the immune system of people in that vicinity is high, which could have resulted in active response to the innoculation. it is possible that they practice healthy life-style and maybe the innocution only augmented the proactiveness of their immune response. If the aforementioned holds true, this evidence could render this evidence invalid.
Moreover, the author assumes that cow flu is the only disease that people suffer from. It is possible that there other disesase the people are prone to, that shows similar symptoms. Even if, there other disease with close symptoms, it is possible that the cow flu's innoculation wwas the only vaccine available. If the above scenario proves true, then this evidence does not hold water.
Finally, the author presumes that a "small possibility" is indicative of the reason to suspend routine administration. Perhaps,
In conclusion, if the above scenarios prove true, the author's conclusion that routine administration of cow flu's innoculation should be suspended does not hold water. The author would need to provide more evidences in order to improve the persuasiveness of his conclusion.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 237, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...in active response to the innoculation. it is possible that they practice healthy ...
^^
Line 3, column 67, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...es that cow flu is the only disease that people suffer from. It is possible that ...
^^
Line 4, column 35, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ter. Finally, the author presumes that a 'small possibility' is indica...
^
Line 4, column 137, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...suspend routine administration. Perhaps, In conclusion, if the above scenarios pr...
^^^
Line 5, column 55, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
... if the above scenarios prove true, the authors conclusion that routine administration ...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, however, if, may, moreover, so, then, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.6327345309 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 11.1786427146 9% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 55.5748502994 54% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1410.0 2260.96107784 62% => OK
No of words: 257.0 441.139720559 58% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.48638132296 5.12650576532 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00390054096 4.56307096286 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.18406835175 2.78398813304 114% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 204.123752495 68% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.536964980545 0.468620217663 115% => OK
syllable_count: 451.8 705.55239521 64% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59920159681 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.3250606764 57.8364921388 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 100.714285714 119.503703932 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3571428571 23.324526521 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.78571428571 5.70786347227 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.163163987406 0.218282227539 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0625766282364 0.0743258471296 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.064255246321 0.0701772020484 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0872744947611 0.128457276422 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0320362173444 0.0628817314937 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 14.3799401198 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 36.28 48.3550499002 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.56 12.5979740519 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.83 8.32208582834 106% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 98.500998004 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 237, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...in active response to the innoculation. it is possible that they practice healthy ...
^^
Line 3, column 67, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...es that cow flu is the only disease that people suffer from. It is possible that ...
^^
Line 4, column 35, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ter. Finally, the author presumes that a 'small possibility' is indica...
^
Line 4, column 137, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...suspend routine administration. Perhaps, In conclusion, if the above scenarios pr...
^^^
Line 5, column 55, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
... if the above scenarios prove true, the authors conclusion that routine administration ...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, however, if, may, moreover, so, then, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.6327345309 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 11.1786427146 9% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 55.5748502994 54% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1410.0 2260.96107784 62% => OK
No of words: 257.0 441.139720559 58% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.48638132296 5.12650576532 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00390054096 4.56307096286 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.18406835175 2.78398813304 114% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 204.123752495 68% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.536964980545 0.468620217663 115% => OK
syllable_count: 451.8 705.55239521 64% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59920159681 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.3250606764 57.8364921388 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 100.714285714 119.503703932 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3571428571 23.324526521 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.78571428571 5.70786347227 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.163163987406 0.218282227539 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0625766282364 0.0743258471296 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.064255246321 0.0701772020484 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0872744947611 0.128457276422 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0320362173444 0.0628817314937 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 14.3799401198 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 36.28 48.3550499002 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.56 12.5979740519 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.83 8.32208582834 106% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 98.500998004 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.